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Anonymous
8/16/21, 6:43 AM
Very hot, the way you do dialogue is a bit confusing though

8/16/21, 2:22 PM
I ha messed up the spacing, it should be fixed now. Sorry about that.
Madoc Larkin
8/16/21, 1:05 PM
This was a nice read! Excited to see where you take it from here. I also thought Jak's input for the Thing box was pretty clever.
8/16/21, 9:42 AM
What may also happened is that Ronny, realizing Fin was his Beta, did whatever he could to get Finn to accept it. If his inner drives were so pumped I can see his own self-justification. He may not have wanted to be without a Beta. I would hope that as they mature in their relationship that they will become more loving and less sex-focused. Ronny said that they're both just two guys. I hope he can realize that he didn't really give Fin a choice and apologize. I think Fin would forgive him soon enough.
8/16/21, 7:10 AM
Great start! Hope there’s more to come.
8/16/21, 6:09 AM
Hot. Can;t wait for more.
Aug 15, 2021
8/16/21, 4:46 AM
Fun little story! I'd like to see a sequel with a subject who's a little less of a slut to begin with--more resistance would make the story even hotter, in my opinion. One suggestion: take the time to proofread your work (or get another GSS user to proofread for you). At one point, Sam notices a "sex swin," which I assume is like a sex swing, but for Southerners ("I'm fixin' to take a ride on the sex swin'! Any y'all wanna join me?").
8/16/21, 1:14 AM
I'm glad they bonded but I'm not happy about Fin being Ronny's "bitch". Semantics I suppose but also he was drugged by the pre-workout drink so he had no choice to really decide. Yes, he could have left when Ronny explained about how Betas have choice but by that point he was addicted.

8/16/21, 4:12 AM
@Cutlerfan I'm glad you feel this way! I wanted to leave the outcome up to the reader's interpretation. Some may think it was true love while others may think Ronny was more devious than he let on.
8/16/21, 3:57 AM
Nothing as satisfying as seeing obnoxious straight boys put into their proper places. On all 4s and in heat. Well done this was a great one to jerk off to. Looking forward to seeing another one.
8/16/21, 2:16 AM
I really like the concept of this series and how crazy it gets. However, there's a ton of typos in the second half of this part, including a couple uses of "she" where you meant "he".
8/15/21, 7:22 AM
Nice continuation of this story! Are you planning to do more with Zain in later chapters? Because I might like to take a stab at writing a short darker-toned spinoff story where Zain brings his plants home to his family. I think there are a lot of themes about (forced) cultural assimilation that could be teased out of such a premise.

Ben
8/16/21, 2:00 AM
Please do@Hypnothrill i'd love to see what you come up with :)