Recent Comments

BravelyShy
8/8/21, 11:17 AM
The fourth paragraph is really hard to read. It's far too long, with so much dialogue crammed together. There should only ever be one speaker in each paragraph, even if that makes it a sentence a paragraph. That's my only real complaint, though. Sure, there are a few spelling and grammar errors here or there, but not so many to distract me aside from that wall of text. Interesting premise otherwise, and it'll be interesting to see how it goes.
8/8/21, 8:42 AM
This has a bit of Everything and just gets me sooo horny. Love
8/8/21, 7:43 AM
Great story from beginning to end. With the rest of the planet to explore, the rescue team arriving and the possible threat of civil war I can't help but hold out hope for a sequel.
Za
8/8/21, 4:59 AM
I look forward to the next chapter!
8/8/21, 3:37 AM
cock will always win
Anonymous
8/8/21, 3:11 AM
Good follow up. Can't wait for the next chapter.
8/8/21, 2:57 AM
I'm so glad you are coming back to this story and characters. I love this couple and would enjoy reading all that happens to them the rest of the way through their senior year and into college. I do hope for a HEA (Happily Ever After).
8/8/21, 12:45 AM
I'm hungry for pre-cum now!! And lots of it!
8/7/21, 11:57 PM
Very well-written. I hoped we would find out exactly why the narrator was being affected by his own subliminals but I respect the total commitment to the 1st person narrative structure.
8/7/21, 11:32 PM
Wonderful!