I thought it was hot. I liked how this one wasn't just an online cyber story like some of your others, and they really had sex. Really liked the humiliation, but wish that his humiliation was drawn out more and the story continued (instead of having the postscript summary).

Former nerd takes down alpha jock? Yes please! Excellent setup and fun execution (switching perspectives - worked great). WoOF!

I got feedback on this story that the ending didn't make sense because the narrator doesn't know he was punished and Mark rewards him kind of in the end. I did a revised version somewhere, but in that version I made the narrator only able to come if Mark fucked him. Rereading it now, I think it would've been better to have made it so that Mark taunts and humiliates the narrator for being so dumb. Maybe even made it so that the narrator can only get off if he's being told he's stupid or a moron, and put into situations that he can't get out of without help from someone smarter than him.

I happen to have a thing for bodybuilders with tiny penises so needless to say this story really, really did it for me.

i want more!!! don't kill of this story! haha

i guess is not mind control.. in our country it called mind breaking

I LOVED IT!!! The text is short but your writing felt amazing to read, loved the pace and the details here and there, really refreshing. Thank you lots <3

its a great story and virtue is defeated

Soft, fluffy transformation; dark subject matter. 😎

Very impressed with this series! Actually re-read through it for the listed wishes and I've been seriously impressed with the through line of the story (not to mention the off the charts smut scenes). The dumb jock unintentionally orchestrating their own fall is always a delicious scenario and I have a weakness for reality change/transformation/magic themes. Since it's been a minute since the last update (no judging, that stint of an update every 3 days with quality as good as you guys put out was nuts) I brain stormed a bit myself. It seems that an upcoming scene is the art classroom with Sam modeling. I think it would be fun to have him model with another person. Maybe Mark ;) (maybe too soon for your time line but just saying lol). And since sex acts are common place in the locker rooms now, maybe the 'pose' the art teacher tells them to assume is the everyday-yawn-worthy event of Sam giving his 'buddy' and apology bro-job. Since they're in the gym they should naturally be in only their jocks. Maybe the whole time Marc is whispering is his gravely voice for Sam to take slow deep breaths with his nose pressed against his jock pouch, on all fours, arched back showing off his straight boy ass (to entice all the sexy ladies drawing him of course). Things are mostly under control until a student complains that they can't properly see the details of Marc's Adonis belt with his jock and so the teacher asks them to fully strip "For the Art!". Another student asks if Sam can get more into the act and actually take Marc into his mouth. Cue magic-dick-induced-throat-gasms with Marc ordering Sam to slowly go deeper and "show me how straight you are" and finally how all the best straight bros swallow every drop so their buds don't need to clean up after. Right before Marc cums a water break is called (possibly with the teacher commenting how she doesn't wants Sam to get dehydrated from all his slick). Sam comes back to him self and with another crisis of personality, he summons the textbook and makes a change making it so his new urges are totally straight bro (Dealer's choice), then resume for the climax. Again, just some quick scribbles, but it's yours to use if you guys haven't plotted out that far yet.