Recent Comments

7/28/21, 2:34 AM
Whoa, this chapter was so hot! My favourite part was the way that you wrote Sam's headspace as these cumulative effects began to distract him and arouse him. Very nicely done! At this point, I feel like I'm in a similar position to Sam in that it's hard to keep track of the many changes, but I also mostly didn't feel like I needed to except when there was deliberate reference back to them without mentioning how they were worded. I loved the idea of the orgasmic voice, and I especially enjoyed Sam enjoying the changes to his ass. That feels like @Nutiper 's touch to me 😁. Delightful! I do think maybe the shower scene could use some massaging. Gabe's physical changes and his attitude have slightly outpaced my sympathy for him and I do miss their earlier dynamic a fair bit. Thanks for this story!

7/28/21, 2:54 AM
Thanks! The orgasmic voice was indeed Nutiper's idea! And yeah, it seems like some of Gabe's changes didn't quite land as intended -- some edits are on the way to clarify what's going on with the main characters! Gabe's still supposed to be a nice guy, even though both the MC's are dumb and horny. @time.to.occur
Vespair
7/27/21, 8:47 PM
that was as coherent and filled with turns as an oscar winning movie. love how flawed even Bussy is, with the implication that this smaller character just keeps screwing herself over because of her own hubris to curse people who annoy her for the sake of making the world better. the best stories are the ones that somehow manage to create intricate twists and turns out of the interactions of a set of flawed, self-interested characters--none of whom are completely good or completely antagonistic. the implications are there, like what did jeffrey do to earn a punishment ten times willem's? and even though it is a hundred for willem, the story didnt read like a laundry list of okay we're done with #76 now lets talk about #77. every chapter showed something different enough where there is not any chapter that shone less than the others. there was something just cinematic about this series

7/28/21, 1:12 AM
@Vespair Thank you so much! I really appreciate all of the kind words. I definitely wanted Bussy to be just a complete mess of a person lol. I thought that would be a lot more interesting than the super mysterious omniscient witch that always seems to appear in these types of stories. Thank you again!
7/26/21, 10:19 PM
hope more is set to come. great story so far.

7/27/21, 9:18 PM
@Jonanator Definitely more to come! Thanks!

7/27/21, 10:35 PM
@The Naked Ginger you welcome. keep it up
7/27/21, 6:25 AM
hotttt. hope more is to come. keep it up.

7/27/21, 2:45 PM
@Jonanator Thank you! There's definitely more to come! Love hearing that you're enjoying it!

7/27/21, 10:34 PM
@time.to.occur yeah, it is an amazing story. the way it's going so far. Keep it up.
Tropical Freeze
7/12/21, 7:26 AM
Yeah the concept was good but it went by so quickly it lost some of the eroticism, i think another draft would do this story a world of good

7/27/21, 10:33 PM
@Tropical Freeze Right on, mister. I'll give this a look through this weekend and repost the story. If the mods will allow that, I do not know.
7/11/21, 1:52 PM
I really like the concept but it all felt like it moved a bit quickly. I'd love to see a bit more time taken over Max's transformation, or his thoughts about the game, and more detail and time spent on the game itself, maybe how he gets used to his life afterwards. Plus it would have been nice to see how he had sex with his partner now he's a huge power top and power bottom! A great idea but if you do more I'd love more detail. Keep up the good work!

7/27/21, 10:32 PM
@Growing Geek Now that the anon is off, I can comment freely! *lolz* I wanted to add more stuff, but I was somewhat in a rush and just submitted it without much adding on. Thanks for the comment!
7/25/21, 9:09 PM
Always glad to see someone use slot machines as a method for change. I did a photocomic based on this premise: [Hot Slots](https://www.deviantart.com/criskane/art/Hot-Slots-TF-M2M-M2F-a-45-page-PDF-photocomic-676691824)

7/27/21, 9:58 PM
Fuck, I wish I'd seen that before. Such a hot comic. The way you did the graphics is amazing. It must have taken ages! @Cris Kane
7/27/21, 9:20 PM
Very true! At least in fictional writing.
7/27/21, 12:27 AM
I hope they get it good! They deserve it! Honestly, though, I don't see how Ben could ever trust any of them again even if they appeared in the show. It will be a very interesting show. They did this to him right before his wedding? Might be simpler, and less amusing, to just cut them out of his life.

7/27/21, 9:19 PM
@Cutlerfan IRL I agree, but where's the fun in that! Payback is the way better option.
7/26/21, 11:36 PM
I'm thrilled to see you pick up with this story. If you need inspiration and/or are taking requests, I'd love to see the somehow locked into the glory holes and then edged for a while until they're begging for gay guys to get them off. On camera, naturally.

7/27/21, 9:18 PM
@Evelded Oh you and I have such similar mindsets ;)