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7/21/21, 10:05 PM
can't wait for the conclusion of this story hypnothrill. I have really enjoyed this
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7/21/21, 9:52 PM
Phenomenal
7/21/21, 9:45 PM
Definitely have to agree with Hypnothrill; good start but take some time to make the differences clearer. Especially as you put Noah in a different class by being taken over by the Master itself, the reader should know how Noah is different from all the other soldiers in the Hive mind. But please keep writing these types of story.
7/21/21, 9:23 PM
loved it! Any sequels or more chapters coming?

7/21/21, 9:27 PM
@bmax definitely, whether continuing this story or just the same universe :)
7/21/21, 8:21 PM
This is a kind of story I absolutely love, but selfishly, I wanted you to slow down and flesh out some of the details of the mental transformations. I hope you write more stories in this vein, but just pace them a bit differently, to give us time to get to know the characters and get into their heads a little bit more.

7/21/21, 9:26 PM
@Hypnothrill thanks for the feedback! This was my first time putting pen to paper all these infections I've had in my head for so long. Maybe next time I'll focus more intimately on just a few characters to add more depth to each character's takeover.
7/21/21, 9:13 PM
I like how it's not everything go as planed, while the doctor were in control (of Brendan), there are still things he can't control and was pushed to go deeper then he planed.
7/21/21, 8:20 PM
This story should continue. It did leave us at the end of this part here.
7/21/21, 8:00 PM
Fun, neat story! Solid entry to the contest :)
7/21/21, 6:51 PM
Lets change the faculty a bit as well
AAA
7/21/21, 5:36 AM
I'm liking the friendliness of the two main chars and well... a fair amount of the fics here have cruel undertones. This does not feel like that. Which is nice and stuff.

7/21/21, 2:12 PM
@AAA I liked it to but disagree about the dark undertones. The part where Gabe goes “It’s the rules that make the game fun,” Gabe said in a funny voice. seem to hint that Gabe has ulterior motives at least

7/21/21, 6:51 PM
@maggiemee88 ulterior motives doesn't means malicous, could be just mischevieuness