I fond the story to be very sweet. Eager to read more.

more of this please its brilliant

Hot. I hope there is more to come.

***AAAH I LOVE IT, THIS IS SO ABSURDLY FUN??*** (or) Neemie, I tried to excerpt some of my favorite moments in order to highlight them in this comment but it ended up being like two dozen extremely funny excerpts and it was just too much for this feeble comment box to handle, much unlike the anal ring of Father Shaughnessy which can apparently handle *lots*— (or) Damn, the way this was *staged*. The elaborate, tight choreography of the three men as they jostle each other and contort and cavort? I could practically see it playing out on a musical pantomime stage, complete with swelling strings and cymbal crashes and a little daft piccolo— (or) *squinting at Father Shaughnessy* Why does he look so much like Father Peter from Derry Girls—

How about changing the teachers into students? Make them younger, teen and innocent about sex.

Great second chapter! The dynamic between Sam and Gabe is brilliant, so warm and funny and sweet. I'm also loving the changes you've chosen for them to write in the book and watching the unexpected (for them) ramifications unfold. Nicely done!

Really enjoying this story and the banter between Sam and Gabe. As weird as it may seem I'd rather the story doesn't end with Gabe becoming gay ---- it's rare to see a genuine friendship between a gay and straight protag. I wonder where this is going. I mean, the timeline's/reality's already been changed aggressively to facilitate Gabe and Sam's edits. What more could be in store for the two?

This was marvelous, like super super marvelous. I love the logic and the nature of their changes and the protections. Everything about this - both the plot heavy setting stuff and the sexual stuff - is brilliant. The interactions between the two is great. They are honestly good friends and I like that. The rules of protection and safety, including memory and also protections about reality changers is brilliant. The fixing of disease, including the way you had them do it (the spurring on from the crisis) was perfect. Cock size growth is awesome, I love how everyone benefits, but gay men more. Maybe they can make bubble butts a thing, that and something like its easier for males to handle cocks up asses. I like how the event that lets them write in the book is something that both get to be around for, that way we don't miss any writing. Marc is interesting, I like how he wants to date Sam, and honestly seems like a nice guy now. The whole watching gay sex at the end was sooooo very hot and sexy. Like gah. So super sexy. How he got distracted by it is interesting. I am not entirely sure what is going on that would have made this happen, and I look forward to the journey, but it seems more magical (so to speak, which might be a hint) then natural. I honestly really like everything about this. Nothing here has me going "oh no, why did that happen." I think the mix of sex based changes and comfort changes is nice. Like maybe they can decide something major to change because they didn't like learning about it and figure this might be a good chance to write a wrong (literally). And then they can be like "well that was fun, now lets think of something sexy to do." hehe Ooh. One thing. I think with sex increasing on their mind they might want to do something that makes it easier for them to do their course work. Like they can fast read and comprehend the material. That its easier for them to keep track of what they need to do in class. Another option is they could increase human learning rates and decrease the amount of work per day, so more fun could be had. Like imagine if they say "technology and society has made it so that full time is now four days at 6 hours per day for a working week of 24 hours" so they can have more sexy times. hehe (As a random thing I could see them realizing that if you have 'free college for all' you need a way to pay for it, which might lead them to making a change that makes it so its a good life and not the dregs due to money issues.) Anyway, this story is brilliant. This chapter was hot. I'm not a gay guy that focuses super on dick, ass is my thing, but I was super enjoying all the dick change talk in this chapter. Mostly due to the flow of how it worked and stuff, it was all super fun and sexy. So yeah, good stuff. Thanks for writing it and I look forward to seeing what comes next. To reading the changes they make to the world, both sexual and practical. Thanks for this!

Oh, two random things. 1. Am I correct in thinking that they can undo something they wrote. That when they cross it out it goes back to what it was before their change. 2. They wrote that Marc has a 'magic dick' which kind of makes the assumption that 'magic' exists. Which leads me to one of them thinking about gaining magical abilities. hehe As an aside, is the story always going to be from Sam's pov? Its not bad, its actually a very interesting element to it. But it could be cool if there is something Gabe does that is super cool, like awesome fun gay sex, we might see it happen from him.

Very hot chapter two. I loved the dick growth, and playing with stereotypes, and self-love time Sam takes. The tone of the story, with how the two friends interact, is great and the rules they set out will make things interesting. I also loved the man in the black suit outside their dorm, hinting at something else afoot. Oh, Marc being a constant thing too is nice and adds even more spice.