Recent Comments

7/19/21, 9:41 AM
you should continue this story. it's rather hottt
7/19/21, 8:23 AM
It ended just as it was getting good!
7/19/21, 7:22 AM
big sub and you'll get a fan for life
7/19/21, 7:20 AM
if this website should be real, can you please give me the name?
7/18/21, 8:36 PM
I have an idea, make the coach a big submissive bottom and in a relationship with one of the teacher of the arts department (like the theater one)

7/19/21, 1:32 AM
I don't currently have plans for any coach characters, but I'll keep it in mind! @darkblade2814

7/19/21, 5:36 AM
@bluesuedewho I see, I hope the idea helps
7/19/21, 3:18 AM
Really interesting concept here, but to echo the above comments, the ideas don't go far enough. Also, I picked up on a lot of tension between the ideas at work (hope vs all of humanity's awfulness) and the fact that it was trying to be sexy. Over my years of reading NSFW stories, there have been a handful that I thought were amazingly good, and actually worsened by the inclusion of sex - that they only included sex because they were published on a website like Nifty or GSS to begin with. Like, the take out the x-rated scenes and they would both work better and be legitimate contenders for mainstream publication. You touch on some pretty big philosophical concepts here that, to my eye, are undermined by trying to make them something guys might jerk off to. I'd encourage you, if it's something you're interested in, to expand on it and not worry about making it sexy!
7/19/21, 3:02 AM
Interesting concept. Even though not all th kinks were up my alley, a lot of your story worked for me and was pretty hot. From a writing standpoint, I think what could help make a stronger connection with the reader is to weave your exposition into your storytelling. The first several hundred words are all about the background, an info-dump, and it was a lot to wade through. I kept waiting for the story to start and action to happen. You can pepper bits of character motivation and backstory into the 'happening right now' action and really improve how engaging it is from start to finish. Nice work overall! Looking forward to seeing who wrote this once the results are up and checking out the rest of your work.
7/19/21, 12:32 AM
Very nice first chapter. It's light, it's fun, and I like that, so far, everyone likes their steadily improving world. Personally I do hope they get around to unifying the university dress code. The gentlemen of campus should have a right to enjoy a shirtless, pantsless experience as well. Great work!

7/19/21, 1:40 AM
Thanks! I've been aiming for light and fun with my recent stories. And as an egalitarian institution, I can guarantee that San Amaro's dress code will soon recognize the rights of male students to attend class sans shirt or pants! @TickledPink
7/18/21, 10:02 PM
I really enjoyed this -- looking forward to more. Glad it isn't just a story where two guys purposefully make it worse for each other. This is a fun relationship.

7/19/21, 1:37 AM
Thanks! I've discovered in the past couple of years that I like stories that take a playful approach to kinks/tropes. I still like the dark "squirmy" stuff from time to time, but stuff with a lighter, fun tone has been the most appealing lately. @absman420
7/18/21, 7:59 PM
Did the boys just end this chapter with a big mistake, inadvertently GIVING Marc a magical cock that he suggested he had but didn't technically have? A charm that he can use to get what he wants, including from Gabe who is not immune to Marc's "magic" and might be turned into Marc's agent against Sam? My head is spinning at the potential for a future chapter.... :)

7/19/21, 1:31 AM
Aha! Glad people are catching that little slip-up from Sam! Lucky for the main characters, Marc only uses his dick for good, not evil. With great junk comes great responsibility! @Steve Shay