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7/15/21, 2:42 PM
I enjoyed the first part but this one's a big improvement with more detail and better exploration of the situation the protagonist is in. The premise is really great too - as the anonymous commenter above says, Quantum Leap for hot gay sex!

7/15/21, 6:01 PM
@Ruffcub Thanks! I definitely tried to expand the detail and transformation, though as usual I need to do better in the mind control part. As I noted in my response above (after you posted this), I only briefly watched one episode of Quantum Leap, but looking at the plot of the show, this wouldn't be too far off from the effect, but it's not exactly the scenario I envisioned.
Anonymous
7/15/21, 1:13 PM
Very hot writing! I'm thinking it is like Quantum Leap with gay boys?

7/15/21, 6:00 PM
I only briefly watched one episode of Quantum Leap, and I refused to watch more because of the main actor who, in my opinion, destroyed Star Trek. I should probably get over that because I liked him in Murphy Brown. Anyway ... looking at the plot of the show, this wouldn't be too far off from the effect.
excitedplayground
7/15/21, 8:02 AM
very jere for the constant transformation

7/15/21, 5:58 PM
@excitedplayground Thanks.
Anonymous
7/15/21, 6:34 AM
nice plot, like the transformations.

7/15/21, 5:58 PM
Thanks, I hope this chapter was better at it!
7/15/21, 4:50 AM
hot! no idea whats happening yet but im here for the ride!

7/15/21, 5:58 PM
@ace_vage Thanks much. I'm glad it's not wholly obvious.
7/15/21, 4:53 PM
I love to see the progression. I hope they expand their operation all over. Hopefully we will see some family businesses joining in.

7/15/21, 5:37 PM
@Gay_Genes We'll definitely get some quick glimpses into how the company is expanding, but this is primarily Leo's story. I do still have a lot more images of suited men I didn't get to use, however, so the idea of the Company taking over a family business might be a pretty good premise for a sequel.
7/15/21, 5:12 PM
you are such a good writer
7/15/21, 2:53 PM
I think this is a great start. I'm not sure where it's going, but am intrigued by the possibilities. Looking forward to your next installment : ) Cheers, LLOYD

7/15/21, 4:45 PM
@Lloyd311 thanks!
Chips
7/15/21, 4:44 PM
Just love your stories and this one will be up there with all the rest
7/15/21, 4:41 PM
Rob is distinctly unlikeable. An abuser more than a master. If that's what you were going for, then that's fine but it didn't quite feel like that was the intent.