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Anonymous
7/13/21, 9:45 AM
great work thanks
Anonymous
7/13/21, 9:24 AM
oh man! such a hot start! Maybe we find out what happens when you don't have a buddy
7/13/21, 7:28 AM
Now this IS interesting. Ordinarily in your stories (and especially the longform ones!), dear Hypnothrill, the protagonist takes a much longer time to fall under the brainwashing. Seeing Leo immediately be conditioned by the muzak is a fun twist! It also makes me wonder just how depraved he'll get, if he's already conditioned enough to accept full-on sex happening in front of him. I wonder what will happen...

7/13/21, 7:34 AM
@Feed Your Head Just you wait! This story all takes place in a single day, but it's got a ton of fun twists.
7/13/21, 7:19 AM
Straight up my alley, can't wait for the next parts!
Jul 12, 2021
7/13/21, 6:12 AM
I want to praise this story for its extremely strong visuals. However, as Lohengrin suggested, it would fit better on GSS if you placed a stronger emphasis on the narrator's mental transformation. His shift from being panicked to being pleased comes very quickly, and there's no sense of mental resistance, which for me would have made it hotter, especially if the transformed narrator spoke in a very different kind of voice at the end (one that sounds dumber or like an emotionless drone).
Daniel
7/13/21, 5:33 AM
the rape ( uhhh conversion ) was so hot dude I.J.S.
Daniel
7/13/21, 5:15 AM
more men...more corruption please dude .I.J.S.
Daniel
7/13/21, 4:59 AM
same I.J.S.
Daniel
7/13/21, 4:53 AM
more please, I love corruption, the 'taking' was hot dude ! I.J.S.
7/13/21, 4:32 AM
Now this is a real short story, well crafted, with the gay transformation parts very well done, and almost perfectly integrated into the story. I almost smell Conan Doyle as a co-author. Or make that Onan-Doyle. This could well be the beginning of a series of stories, using the the three named characters thus far. It would surely be a classic. Reminds me of Mr. Benson.