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7/13/21, 12:12 PM
Me too
7/13/21, 5:39 AM
Fascinating read. Well enjoyed it in an ASMR kinda way - mentally tickled, but became so absorbed by the mystery it didn't tickle the pickle. Not that the sex scenes aren't well written, they are, but I think you conveyed his confusion too well for me not to go on the head trip with him. Oh, and bravo for the protagonist being clearly non-white without resorting to stereotypes or it even being a plot issue.

7/13/21, 11:39 AM
Thanks for the feedback, @scudder. I was very tempted just to not describe Casper's skin tone at all and just let it be whatever the reader imagined, but really wanted to put that diversity out there. I'm glad it worked for you!
7/13/21, 10:31 AM
your stories have a way of making others discover more about there world and what needs to change awesome
Anonymous
7/13/21, 10:16 AM
hot daddy
Anonymous
7/13/21, 9:45 AM
great work thanks
Anonymous
7/13/21, 9:24 AM
oh man! such a hot start! Maybe we find out what happens when you don't have a buddy
7/13/21, 7:28 AM
Now this IS interesting. Ordinarily in your stories (and especially the longform ones!), dear Hypnothrill, the protagonist takes a much longer time to fall under the brainwashing. Seeing Leo immediately be conditioned by the muzak is a fun twist! It also makes me wonder just how depraved he'll get, if he's already conditioned enough to accept full-on sex happening in front of him. I wonder what will happen...

7/13/21, 7:34 AM
@Feed Your Head Just you wait! This story all takes place in a single day, but it's got a ton of fun twists.
7/13/21, 7:19 AM
Straight up my alley, can't wait for the next parts!
Jul 12, 2021
7/13/21, 6:12 AM
I want to praise this story for its extremely strong visuals. However, as Lohengrin suggested, it would fit better on GSS if you placed a stronger emphasis on the narrator's mental transformation. His shift from being panicked to being pleased comes very quickly, and there's no sense of mental resistance, which for me would have made it hotter, especially if the transformed narrator spoke in a very different kind of voice at the end (one that sounds dumber or like an emotionless drone).
Daniel
7/13/21, 5:33 AM
the rape ( uhhh conversion ) was so hot dude I.J.S.