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7/12/21, 11:18 AM
I'm a sucker for cutesy endings. I will say the pacing feels off for me, it wraps up very quickly, but I like the back-story for Hunter, and his relationship with his parents. Honestly the part where the family is just looking at the tabloid photos is my favourite part of the whole thing. Also, I thought Ollie was going to end up with John. There are enough characters to make another chapter, or twelve. Hope this story continues! It kind of feels like the start of a sit-com. Penelope can cause some mischief.

Anonymous
7/12/21, 6:14 PM
@Norismo Yup. When I decided to try to write the idea out, there was only a day left in the contest. For me, that means there was basically only time to write a first draft, have one second view time, and a basic edit (not much more than a spell check). I did make some decisions to minimize my want-to-make-massive-edits-mode, but it definitely affected the pacing. John was a purposeful mislead, since I felt like if it were too obvious, the whole gameshow part could feel like a long, boring exposition dump where no gay stuff could happen until after it.
7/12/21, 4:52 PM
I really enjoyed this one! Definitely an intriguing workplace... superb sex scenes -- you really kept that line of fantasy and reality blurring in a satisfying way.
7/9/21, 7:45 PM
Great Story! Glad he enjoys his new body.

screamingmoist
7/12/21, 4:34 PM
@Cutlerfan Thanks! it was fun to have a guy get slimmed down and actually enjoy it.
7/12/21, 4:18 PM
Though this is revenge, there isn't any humiliation. The bully isn't a jerk enough for more than this and the MC isn't evil enough to hurt him. Well, it's really well done overall. There is no angst that could kill my boner so it's a really pleasant surprise. Good job. Continue like that.
Jul 1, 2021
7/12/21, 3:35 PM
I admit I'm sad that Tracus' master threw him away when Tracus held so much affection, if not love, for him just because he was date raped. Kinda ruined it for me, I kept hoping that he would rescue him in the end and then say "See apprentice what befalls ignorance, take heed moving forward in your learnings." or something like that.
7/12/21, 3:22 PM
I cant wait for the next chapter
7/12/21, 3:09 PM
Aww, I really wish the ending was more erotic. I would've loved a descriptive sex scene.
guardG
7/12/21, 2:45 PM
Please continue the story. I'd like to see more of what will happen to Forest.
7/12/21, 1:44 PM
Perfect stuff. I love conversion fucks and men becoming brothers.
jjjjjjjjj
7/12/21, 12:41 PM
This was fun to read