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7/11/21, 6:33 PM
This was very fun. I love the play of author dynamics and the narative.I love reading your experimental stuff.

7/11/21, 7:16 PM
Thanks @Cadek! I’m glad it came across well. I was worried about the author interview section because I thought I might be going too meta, but I’m glad to see it came across alright. I’ll try to be less shy about sharing my experimental stuff in the future.
Willie Cici
7/11/21, 4:56 PM
That was one of the most creatively written stories I ever read. And, I'm not limiting my critique to this blog. It is a wonderful, imaginative story.

7/11/21, 7:15 PM
Thank you @Willie Cici. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Sometimes, when I hit post on something like this, I have no idea if I’ll wake up to wonderfully positive comments, or to people saying wtf. Thanks, I appreciate you.
7/11/21, 6:13 PM
other than what hypnothrill pointed out, i think it was a bit rushed. The hypnosis is not really so I say, presented well. If I may suggest, we can set and add the mood on the hypnosis. Since the tea, can put the person who drank it in a suggestive state (like in hypnosis), we can further that in a way we put suggestion to the main character. I believe for a guy who is lusting for his ideal man, it is better to put in a setting that involves the un-hypnotic state. It is more thrilling to put him aware of what is happening yet cannot controlled himself or understand himself but still confused and enjoys what was happening. For example, in a hypnotic state, where I touch your skin, it will arouse you.. that mood setting. Like Christian Grey would say, I don't do necrophilia or unresponsive to sexual acts. With this suggestion of skin touching, as a friend since you are tired, I just learn a new massage... care to try? and the story will mode on that in a erotic way and that it will not be rushed. Some points I can suggest to improved the story with enticing stimulation... lols. :)
7/11/21, 5:29 PM
this is a such a great series. would love to meet Jake
7/11/21, 5:24 PM
ahh, the origins of the suits and servitude begin to show themselves. very nice to watch unfold. i do lose this series. thank you for adding more to it!
7/11/21, 2:23 PM
Loved this concept! it was creative, philosophical, and hot all rolled into one! As a man who had never felt "gay enough" for the community, I loved your comments about not having to explicitly state that a character is gay. Ive been a fan of your work for a long time, and i love this new experimental route you're going!

7/11/21, 3:56 PM
Thanks @Milo! I’ve also never felt ‘gay enough’, and it’s really frustrating to me. It’s okay - you’re perfect exactly the way you are.
7/11/21, 1:59 PM
Really interesting story. I loved the character calling out the sex scene should be longer. Then I loved the character asking the author to make his dick bigger. Then I loved the super romance story happy ending. Very interesting and fun.

7/11/21, 3:47 PM
Heh, thanks @MonsterMash62. I love when you comment on my stories. And see - I am capable of writing a happy ending!
JockPupTraxxx
7/11/21, 1:50 PM
I loved the meta of this story. Another great one

7/11/21, 3:46 PM
Thanks @JockPupTraxxx! If you like the meta and you haven’t read it yet, I’d also suggest my story [A Metaphor for Kyle](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/10000536).
7/11/21, 12:16 PM
This story made me smile! It was very cute!

7/11/21, 3:44 PM
@time.to.occur Thank you! I’m glad everyone was able to follow it. I was a little worried that it would only make sense to me.
7/11/21, 10:01 AM
Great story! You're so good at writing this sort of metafiction that makes the reader laugh, but is still erotic.

7/11/21, 3:43 PM
Thanks @Hypnothrill, I was hoping you’d get a kick out of this one. My husband is always laughing at me because I trend towards the meta in almost everything I do.