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7/8/21, 8:39 PM
Ha, ha! Ohhhh, my! My,my,my,my,my, so delicious! I was anxiously waiting for a new chapter, and of course you always go some steps ahead of what I expected. It was great to see such a hot chapter with the oh-so-straight Nate. I would love to see him eventually bottoming, playing with his "tits" and talking of himself in the way Milo does (but of course he's straight, ha, ha). At the first I didn't liked how Milo was so bitchy and scornful toward the cowboys while he's so annoyingly naive. It never got to the point of being unpleasant, but I found him not so likeable, or better said, he was my less favorite of the group, but the more I read, the more I like the character. Which is a bit strange because he haven't changed much, but now I appreciate him more. Is great to see Cody so interested on milking, eager to help men and being Milo's sweet little slut, , and also see all the men around them changing more and more. It's a wonderful story, man!
7/8/21, 8:35 PM
Just to be clear. The story series is well written and intriguing. I don't want to discourage your writing over one issue.
Jul 8, 2021
Anonymous
7/8/21, 4:52 PM
Great story!

7/8/21, 8:06 PM
Glad you enjoyed it!
Jul 8, 2021
Anonymous
7/8/21, 3:04 PM
excellent!!!

7/8/21, 8:06 PM
Thank you!
Jul 8, 2021
7/8/21, 7:10 AM
Great story! I love the twist that Carter is like the 40th agent that they've sent in there. It just could have used a little more description of the music itself.

7/8/21, 8:01 PM
@Hypnothrill Thank you! I admit that the reason I didn't go into much detail with the music because I know nothing about music beyond what sounds good and what dosen't. So I didn't feel confident about going into detail with the music.
7/8/21, 6:39 PM
WHOA that was a wild ride! I didn't expect Noah to be able to be the one to pull through, but holy shit that was WELL DONE. Poor Sal, he really did get his brain shredded, but Lucky? WHAT an ASSHOLE. I like that he got what he deserved, and that Noah and Ken are going to have a very interesting marraige from now on.
7/8/21, 8:09 AM
The story is a little too rapey for my tastes, but for some readers that will be part of the appeal. I wonder if this is the kind of story that only works if the reader heavily identifies with the narrator. I just couldn't get over the fact that Ace, who repeatedly gets described as "sweet," gets taken advantage of by the guy he thinks is his best friend (but who has in fact been plotting to drug and rape him for weeks). This is the kind of story that, for me at least, would probably work better if we had more complex characterization. I'd build off the one really interesting line at the start: "He’s the sweetest guy I’ve ever known *when he’s not with his jock friends*." I can imagine a version of the story where Ace basically shuns the narrator when he's around his jock friends. Where, after the narrator comes out as gay, Ace stops hanging out with him in public, because he's afraid his jock friends will think he's gay too. Where Ace is only willing to come over to the narrator's house when he's sure that no one will see him. Where Ace starts bragging about his sexual exploits with girls, about this one girl who was reluctant to have sex with him until he plied her with alcohol. If Ace was that kind of character--basically, equally as "confused" and self-absorbed and rapey as the narrator himself--then the story would work a lot better for me.

Anonymous
7/8/21, 4:09 PM
@Hypnothrill Hey! I totally get that, I think I wasn't realizing what I was creating until I read it again later haha. I definitely will play around with more characterization and make it less rapey.
7/8/21, 3:50 PM
Hi, Great story, got my juices flowing.
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7/8/21, 3:44 PM
Wow, that took a dark turn. I hope we'll see more of the world and meet new characters. It could be awesome to have a "beta resistance" given the domineering relationships between alphas and betas. I may be in the minority but I admit I liked it better when it was more wholesome. I have a thing with informed consent (which is funny, given the nature of this site), but that is just me and once again, this was a very interesting twist
Anonymous
7/8/21, 1:16 PM
Holy shit, this was super hot!