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6/26/21, 3:20 AM
Really interesting premise. The stuff with the Priapists provides a new twist on the familiar world-change story. I just wish there was some more overt mind control in this first section. Charlie isn't really having conversations with the men around him, except for with the Priapist who is self-aware of what's happening. It would be really hot if he had some conversations with guys like Donovan or the security guard, which would show how their thinking is changing (and growing more sexualized) in the wake of this world change.
rwriter51
6/26/21, 3:13 AM
This story's ace, man. Just finished this 1st chapter and moving right on to the next. Jax is an idiot. It will be nice to see him get his comeuppance.
6/26/21, 3:11 AM
A very intriguing start! I'll be looking forward to more! I'm fascinated by the Priapists and their role in all this!
6/25/21, 6:50 PM
A very interesting, dream-like quality in your writing style, but like a dream this left me very unclear about details and my inability to find focus clearly on the smoke-like images you generated left me sadly flaccid. Not saying it's not well-written, it is. It has a Lovecraftian feel to it that I really enjoyed and it invites expansion to explore more of the world you create.

6/25/21, 6:59 PM
@scudder Thank you for the feedback! It is so helpful to know what's working well stylistically and what could be improved!

6/26/21, 2:18 AM
After I wrote my message, I've been trying to remember if I've ever read anything that evokes the fluid-pumping, intense focus of a wet dream while still maintaining that gossamer-like, languid quality of dream imagery which you did very well.

6/26/21, 2:51 AM
@scudder That's such a compliment -- thank you! If something does come to mind, please feel free to share!
6/26/21, 1:55 AM
Encantandor.... que mas le hizo el Chico a su Padrastro?
Doug
6/26/21, 1:16 AM
please, please, please! let us have more!!
6/25/21, 11:25 PM
nice start, I hope to see more soon
Anonymous
6/25/21, 9:55 PM
still dying to know what happens next. love this series
Dec 24, 2020
6/25/21, 9:06 PM
would like to know what will happen next? is this going to b a part of a series? it would b interesting if derek found out about what gary did & eventually did some payback to him like making him his slave or something......
rwriter51
6/25/21, 6:42 PM
I just love this story, and it would work great in a pure fantasy SFW version, too. I look forward to more chapters. Personally, I'd let West get fucked, either by Zeke or his gf, or maybe all three of the companions. It would serve him right for having her tag along on a boy's weekend. LOL

6/25/21, 7:13 PM
Haha well that's one way to punish him 😆. Yeah I always wanted to write a fantasy series that was for all audiences, but I never sit down and actually stick with it. For some reason I am able to wip out chapter after chapter when it comes to adult literature. Though even then I get all over the place and have multiple projects going at once. Thank you for the read and feedback. 😄@rwriter51