Recent Comments

6/22/21, 3:23 AM
I've never commented before, but GOD this story is so hot! It really combines so many great elements... brain drain, huge transformation, and lots of affection, which I'm a sucker for. I can't wait for the next entry!
6/22/21, 2:37 AM
yes please. would like to see more

6/22/21, 3:19 AM
Well glad you enjoyed. I definitely think there will be more to this story ๐Ÿ˜„@Somnius
6/22/21, 1:29 AM
Nicely done!
rwriter51
6/22/21, 1:06 AM
Hot story. Billy is much more susceptible than he thought. Goody for us!
Anonymous
6/22/21, 12:15 AM
it's great that more Lexes are coming ; ) can't wait to see how the two see lexeed danny!!
6/22/21, 12:04 AM
I liked the excellent simultaneous body mind transformation. Hot story.
6/21/21, 9:50 PM
This is STILL one of the hottest stories (all 3 chapters) on this website. The combination of your excellent and vivid writing and the premise is just so fucking amazing. I'm still waiting for a continuation!
6/21/21, 7:45 PM
I hope to see more, I like this one

6/21/21, 7:51 PM
Well I did leave it open intentionally to be able to continue this story. Thank you for the feedback. ๐Ÿ˜Š@darkblade2814

6/21/21, 7:56 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) I have two suggestions, if you want, make the orc fall in love with a hobgoblin or a bugbear (as their species are mortal enemies) and make one of the other two end up with a dragonborn, so what do you think?

6/21/21, 8:06 PM
Well I do know Zeek (the tefling) is going to end up with Leif. As for the other two I thought about having them sleep together as they were a couple beforehand....though who knows their new memories and lives may lead down separate paths. Thank you for the suggestions, and also I did need another race or two for the kingdom of Pryde. ๐Ÿ˜Š @darkblade2814

6/21/21, 8:07 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) polygamy is an option

6/21/21, 8:11 PM
Very true. I have definitely worked with poly relationships in the past (Stories and in my personal life). ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜Š@darkblade2814

6/21/21, 8:17 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) in the NSFW sotry I'm planing, ther will be mentions of polagamy, but it won't be shown in detail, I'm still not confortable with it yet, also the NSFW will by my first attempt ant gay love (I'm bisexual, is I think I should know how to do both)

6/21/21, 8:18 PM
@darkblade2814 * it is why

6/21/21, 8:35 PM
Haha well poly in stories is probably easier, it is a challenge, just as any relationship, a lot of communication and honesty in expressing wants and emotions. But it can be very rewarding, and poly dosen't mean "open", for me and my BF we only do committed triads. In some of my works the poly characters even form their own family units with sometimes up to five individuals (real life three is what the BF and I are comfortable with). But honestly for me it's kind of like my characters and relationships unfold as I am writing (like my characters are telling me their story?). @darkblade2814

6/21/21, 8:42 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge), yes, that is a way of writing, I'm writing some SFW stories before doing the 3 NSFW stories

6/21/21, 9:06 PM
Well when I first thought of writing stories I never foresaw writing adult literature of any sort, but I am actually becoming confident in my stories, even though it's a limited audience. And if you publish here I'd be happy to give them a read ๐Ÿ˜„@darkblade2814

6/21/21, 9:13 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) I'm planing on doing that, but I will do the SFW ones first, as they were concived first
Anonymous
6/21/21, 7:41 PM
Feel like this wouldโ€™ve worked much better as the start of a series than it does as a challenge one-shot. We spend a lot of time being introduced to all of the characters, but by the time we reach the climax three of them have essentially been sidelined Also, we keep flipping between โ€œShiroโ€ and โ€œShrioโ€ throughout the story. Would be great if you could go back and fix whichever is wrong as it starts to get quite distracting

6/21/21, 7:49 PM
I did leave it open to possibly being series depending on how it was received. I didn't want to get too carried away as the story was already quite lengthy from the build up, and it's suggested to keep under 10,000 words. Also why I was a bit quick on the progression from Shrio to Selvin. Thank you for the feedback, and if I do proceed with the series I will try to flesh out the remaining three characters progression to make it a bit easier to follow. ๐Ÿ˜„
Anonymous
6/21/21, 7:07 PM
awesome