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Jun 17, 2021
6/18/21, 3:14 PM
What a fantastic story! Very well written, nicely paced, great conclusion. And this is your first story? WOW! You are a natural storyteller!
Thiago
6/18/21, 3:01 PM
i love your story 😍😍😍😍😍🤤🤤🤤
Thiago
6/18/21, 3:01 PM
I can't read the fourth part please could you send me to my email or be able to unblock it I want to wear that sweatshirt🤤very good story I want the end please🙏😭
6/18/21, 2:22 PM
Wow. cant believe I missed this. would love to hear more about the football players at the end of part 2 but i know thats a long shot (wink wink). I love the stories of inadvertent transformations. they don't understand quite what's happening to them, its unexpected, the rationalizations for the gay sex. I'm dying to hear more of Big and Little Bud too from the Littleman's story. If you published that original story in book form on Amazon id buy it in a heartbeat. Maybe we'd get an extra coda to it. Thanks again!
Jun 17, 2021
Anonymous
6/18/21, 12:49 PM
Wow, your first story? You do a wonderful job creating images with words, and have a lovely sense of rhythm & tone.
6/18/21, 11:24 AM
very good more please Daddy
6/18/21, 8:55 AM
One last suggestion for you: keep in mind that the transformation methods in ForbiddenArcanum's story don't make a whole lot of sense. If the mind controller in that story can magically transform people into big-lipped blond clones simply by watching the videos, then why does he need the facemasks and gummies and everything else? Because of the way that story is told--with a steady escalation and fast pace--most readers won't stop to think about those kinds of realistic logical questions; they'll just get immersed in the dreamlike fantasy of it all. But if you want to tell your story in a different way--complete with a scene of Sir directly explaining his plan--then you need to decide: is this going to be a story where the mind control/transformation is caused by technology (the gummies and face-masks) or by magic? I'd suggest the latter, because some of the hottest details in your story (like the cop's response or the videos full of quiffed blond boys responding to Jake and Harry's livestream) could only be explained by magic. So just resist the compulsion to have the "talking villain" scene where the villain over-explains precisely how his evil mind control scheme works. It will only raise more questions than it answers.

6/18/21, 9:54 AM
@Hypnothrill Thank you so much for all these suggestions, I've already been thinking about how to tackle some of these parts, gives me a nice chance to look into this "Sir" sir a bit ;) But again: thanks. This is really appreciated
6/18/21, 3:20 AM
Another extremely satisfying chapter. I love the way their lives and sexualities are reshaped with the memory adustments. I'm really enjoying this story, and all the boxes it checks for me. Thanks for writing!

6/18/21, 9:13 AM
Glad you enjoyed, and more on the way 😄@Uncle Arctos
Anonymous
6/18/21, 8:23 AM
When will the next chapter come out?
6/18/21, 7:36 AM
Amazing~~ Seems like most of people are interesting in the story of AN-14-0213979, Which is more like traditional drone type (mindless and robotic, only proceed their programs). Me too >///< Will he be the next main role after Noel ?