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6/17/21, 9:36 PM
Great ideas in this story, but I feel like it's too fast-paced and needs more description of the characters. Harry and Jake's transformations would have a lot more impact if we knew what they looked like before. Also, some of the stuff about the methods of transformation (e.g. face-masks, gummies) didn't really make sense to me until I read that "Viral Sensation" story you linked to. I also had a hard time understanding why Trevor decided not to check in on his best friends for an entire week after he saw that video. You started with a perfect set-up: Trevor and Noah are out of town and doing a digital detox for a month. Why couldn't Harry and Jake's entire transformation take place over that month? And then when he got home, Trevor would stay up watching a series of videos on their OnlyFans that documented their transformation, then decide he needed to try and rescue them. All these critiques aside, I did really get turned on by elements of this story, and I'm excited to read the conclusion!

6/18/21, 5:25 AM
@Hypnothrill Thanks for your comment! Glad to hear some of it turned you on :) Initially the reason Trevor did not do anything during the week was a death in his family. But I did not want to dive into that too much and in that way it felt a bit like an "emotional whiplash" as a friend of mine put it. So, since I did want to experiment with jumps in time, I did it like this. My initial plan was to indeed have the transformations of both boyfriends take place over that month, but in the end I wanted to introduce "Sir" and Austin first. When I decided to make this a multi-part story I opted for giving a little glimpse of a transformation in here, a more detailed description will follow in the second chapter (which will probably be fully focused on a transformation, a bit like ForbiddenArcanum's version). My hope is that this second chapter will also allow this chapter to breathe a bit more and stand a little stronger than it does now :)

6/18/21, 6:52 AM
@Transformheaven You're totally right that the "death in the family" line would have felt like emotional whiplash, but Trevor's sudden apathy towards his supposed best friends also induces a feeling of emotional whiplash. If you wanted to, you could make a small edit to this part of the story and make Trevor's reaction part of the effect of Sir's magic (just like the policeman's reaction to Austin seems to be). For instance, you could have a bit of dialogue like this: "Are you still upset about that video?" Noah asked. "What video?" Trevor sounded clueless. "You know! The one we just watched with..." Noah's voice trailed off as he tried to recall the details of the video. It all seemed increasingly blurry. He stared off into space for a moment, then said, "What were we talking about?" "Beats me. Maybe we should get some sleep." Then you could pick up with a line like: "The next weekend, Trevor was doing some cleaning when he came across an old photo of Harry and Jake. 'Harry and Jake! I haven't thought of them in ages! I wonder how they're doing. Maybe I can check if they're still livestreaming,' Trevor thought."
6/18/21, 5:01 AM
I look forward to seeing Chris's further transformation into a werewolf and his interaction with the other guys at camp. Will Jason be able to keep the other guys away until Chris has fully transformed or will something happen to their mating bond?
Anonymous
6/18/21, 3:37 AM
Listen to Hypnothrill. He knows what he's talking about.
6/18/21, 2:40 AM
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Jun 17, 2021
Anonymous
6/18/21, 2:35 AM
really really good. excellent writing. thanks!
Anonymous
6/18/21, 2:03 AM
The plot of your next story could be that a good father were transformed into serving drone by his son. It will be hot.
Evan
6/18/21, 1:46 AM
Excellent story. Great concept and interpretation of the prompt. I really love how Zak compels himself to take care of Tom. That's a really powerful choice on top of the hotness of the rest of the story.
6/18/21, 1:27 AM
This story, and others of yours, are responsible for a large number of my orgasms. lol Just saying.
6/18/21, 1:14 AM
Oh Danny Boy, the Lex, the Lex are calling, from hole to dick, and cock plugged down your throat. Hot story. You know from my previous comments how much I like resistance in just the right amount which you do so well. But this story shows how hot it can be with no resistance. Just follow the pheromones and give in. Woof!