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May 4, 2020
Anonymous
6/12/21, 1:02 PM
love it keep going
6/12/21, 12:57 PM
I hadn't realised that you had changed your username until I saw your post in Hypnothrill's recent story! Great to see more from you. You were one of my favourite authors growing up
6/12/21, 12:54 PM
This is very hot to see more stories from you and set in Topaz172's VT world. I really enjoyed it and hope to see more. Thank you for the story
6/12/21, 12:11 PM
Chapter 2 was even better! Kept me hard and wanting more. Ricky has a great thing with Chris and the sex keeps getting better & hotter. On to chapter 3.
6/12/21, 2:32 AM
option 3 for sure
6/11/21, 8:50 PM
this is so good, the wait was worth it! i hope to see more of coach using Chris! One request, please have him do more domestic chores, be more submissive and slave like!

6/12/21, 12:25 AM
@Erratic101 Glad you liked it! Don't worry - I think you will love what I'm thinking about for the next couple of chapters! I'm also a big fan of "domestic bliss". ;)
6/11/21, 11:51 PM
Grammer could use some clean up, but otherwise you did pretty great! The story is almost entirely erotic. I like the fantasy are massive muscular men being hypnotized by smaller guys! I Hope you write more.
6/11/21, 9:47 PM
A fantastic spin on one of my all time legendary stories in MC. The inner dialogue and the things he begins to understand/feel for and coming from Talon is amazing.
6/11/21, 9:17 PM
I liked the lead in and premise but once the game started, it was too quick. i think each of the contests should have been a chapter and let the temptation or fall develop. I think , as good as it was, this could be incredible. even amongst the Best of or highest rated series.

6/11/21, 9:32 PM
@Stroppy Author I don't think the contest rules allow multi-part stories, but after I lose (which i most certainly will) I could split it up. I agree the games are very rushed, and even the ending doesn't work that well for me. It feels unfinished. Then again, if I expand it, it could go on for eternity.
Martin
6/11/21, 9:32 PM
Yes, please let us know how this goes on... how both the boys succumb to their master...