Recent Comments

6/11/21, 8:50 PM
this is so good, the wait was worth it! i hope to see more of coach using Chris! One request, please have him do more domestic chores, be more submissive and slave like!

6/12/21, 12:25 AM
@Erratic101 Glad you liked it! Don't worry - I think you will love what I'm thinking about for the next couple of chapters! I'm also a big fan of "domestic bliss". ;)
6/11/21, 11:51 PM
Grammer could use some clean up, but otherwise you did pretty great! The story is almost entirely erotic. I like the fantasy are massive muscular men being hypnotized by smaller guys! I Hope you write more.
6/11/21, 9:47 PM
A fantastic spin on one of my all time legendary stories in MC. The inner dialogue and the things he begins to understand/feel for and coming from Talon is amazing.
6/11/21, 9:17 PM
I liked the lead in and premise but once the game started, it was too quick. i think each of the contests should have been a chapter and let the temptation or fall develop. I think , as good as it was, this could be incredible. even amongst the Best of or highest rated series.

6/11/21, 9:32 PM
@Stroppy Author I don't think the contest rules allow multi-part stories, but after I lose (which i most certainly will) I could split it up. I agree the games are very rushed, and even the ending doesn't work that well for me. It feels unfinished. Then again, if I expand it, it could go on for eternity.
Martin
6/11/21, 9:32 PM
Yes, please let us know how this goes on... how both the boys succumb to their master...
Martin
6/11/21, 9:21 PM
Very promising... I'm really looking forward to read more of this!
6/11/21, 9:18 PM
You're one of the best writers on here. I love everything you write.
Jun 10, 2021
Robodrone
6/11/21, 6:05 PM
Oh Yeah, you had me at giant balls and jockstrap sex man! Fuck me into shape dude, i can handle that! Good work. Fast moving, lots of detail at the right pace. Revenge fucking. What a concept!
6/11/21, 3:56 PM
Love the story; always looking forward to it. Wouldve been really hot if Art was unknowingly under Ricky's influence as well

6/11/21, 5:24 PM
@Mezzmer Thanks! Interesting idea, re: Art. I'd always imagined him as somewhat of a co-conspirator, but who knows where things will end up!
6/11/21, 10:05 AM
oh man,I love the story of this can't wait for the next chapter already🙈

6/11/21, 5:22 PM
@ForgottenCradle Thanks man! It'll be a couple weeks for the next chapter - I still have to ruminate on some plot points before I put pen to paper. Glad to hear you're enjoying the directions I've taken!