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6/9/21, 3:57 AM
option 1!!
Pretty good
6/9/21, 3:45 AM
pretty
6/9/21, 3:15 AM
option 1!!! so hot! love it a nice recap of the rules could be helpful
6/9/21, 3:13 AM
Not a bad story. I like what you have here. Would be interesting if the bottle also made other changes happen.
6/9/21, 3:09 AM
So well written, I love love love the first 4 paragraphs
firesix
6/8/21, 8:00 PM
Well written as always, but I found it hard to follow in places. Even after reading it twice, I'm not sure what the rules of the universe are or really what was going on. I thought at first it was just taking place in the normal world, then suddenly magic, then suddenly a witch doctor, then suddenly dwarves, then a horse cop. I wish the story had more explanations because it left me confused.

6/8/21, 10:29 PM
@firesix I read it as a horned up version of the world from Onward, and that worked for me!

6/9/21, 3:04 AM
@the brain exotic @firesix Thank you firesix for the feedback! @the brain exotic is on point in that recently consuming Onward, Circe, and WandaVision primed me to sort of take a magical world premise for granted. I was originally just going to do the "normal world but with a curse" sort of thing, but I just had this witch doctor scene in my head that I couldn't drop, and then the world just became more and more magical as I wrote it. But I still tried to make it similar to our real world that just happens to have some magic things that are normal - for instance instead of our physicians, there are witch doctors. I left a lot of gaps for the reader to fill in on this one. It was partly intentional, but I may have gone a little too far. I wanted to reader to feel a bit disoriented, hoping it would add to the effect of Brian breaking down in the end. I also left out explicit sex scenes, hoping I set up the fantasy well enough for the reader to fill in whatever happened during those years in captivity. (Also I personally imagined some pretty brutal things happening in that time that I frankly didn't want to sit down and write about.) I will add that an interpretation I particularly like is that the universe of the story actually began as our "normal world" but once Brian was cursed, reality slowly altered so much that all the other magical parts were created - going so far as to creating all the magical creatures in the past - hence the bit about theology that the witch doctor brings up. I can't claim that that was my plan from the start, and it's not the most thought out, but it's a take I wouldn't discourage. Especially since I didn't originally envision the world to be very magical, but as I was writing it, it just felt like it was telling me to get more and more magical... I was getting swayed by the witch's curse!
Apr 11, 2021
6/9/21, 2:43 AM
I'm very excited for more! I love infestation!
6/8/21, 10:46 PM
Damn this one is really good. you've done it again.

Oddballs
6/9/21, 2:27 AM
@Tough Guy Takedown I felt I could have embellished the anal sex scene though. I'm waiting on the edit getting approved now.
6/8/21, 10:50 PM
Amazing! My favorite setting, and you did a great job with it. Also, loved the originality of the seduction.

6/9/21, 2:15 AM
@Essex Thanks!
6/9/21, 12:14 AM
its nice to receive tribute