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2/14/25, 4:24 AM
You're just checking all my boxes for a hot feminization story. Really hoping for more!

2/17/25, 12:51 AM
@[astrologus](/user/show/1037572) I've been thinking of adding everyone else in the house getting turned- so eventually, three more parts (but it'll be a bit most likely)

2/17/25, 1:02 AM
@[CatherineOfBearagon](/user/show/10005930) You are my new favorite writer and inspiration. Write what brings you joy and we'll enjoy it too! 💞
2/16/25, 9:19 PM
Incredible story, it sounds like a novel by a famous author, you have an excellent future as a writer. I look forward to your next projects in the future, although I feel a little sorry for Hunter (Luminark) for having fallen again into the mind games of another villain.:pensive:

2/16/25, 10:30 PM
@[Belfertan88](/user/show/10011380) I'm flattered at the kind words. Yeah...someone had to be the sacrificial lamb and I'd made him to have the imagery...just like gold to black...light to dark...poor guy.
2/16/25, 10:24 PM
Super hot as always Jack! Excited to see where this will lead.
Kanan
2/16/25, 10:16 PM
Fuck this is so hot, really hope there’s more to come!
2/16/25, 9:02 PM
I live to serve the virus
hypnopaladin
2/16/25, 4:45 PM
I hate that this had to end. I am surprised that you've not gotten a lot more feedback as this was an amazing journey from start to finish. I want you to know I appreciate the work that went into this and hope whatever your "fantasy novel" ends up being is HALF has good as this! Please don't let this be the end for Rocky and Colt...you left it open and I hope you come back sooner than later.

2/16/25, 6:38 PM
@hypnopaladin Thank you. Truly.
Bob
2/16/25, 6:35 PM
I live to serve the virus
2/16/25, 5:28 PM
Have to confess... this one got me coming back, and cumming back. Cannot wait for the next part, as soon as you can make it. Thank you for this.
nycboot
2/16/25, 4:57 PM
Wow, what a story series. I loved the mind control aspects of it, but I think what sticks with me are the characters. (Reflecting on this, I think of the most memorable stories for me are the ones where I, the reader, make some kind of emotional connection with a character or characters - off the top of my head I think of [Brother-in-Law Christmas](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/series/show/792354), [Volunteers](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/series/show/10000310) and of course [Brain Feed](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/1670).) As I said in a comment to a previous installment, the point-of-view starts out from Colt's, but by the end, I've "given up" trying to understand Colt. We never really know what's going on in his mind, even after he gives Rocky the engraved necklace. He's knowably only through his actions. As you can tell, I predicted some of the outcomes given the chapters you provided. That doesn't bother me at all: Many people think that one needs to have an strong element of surprise for the end (as I said in a previous comment, some authors deliberately defeat the build-up to have this element of surprise which I think is both poor authorship and extremely frustrating for the reader). In my opinion, to give the reader the various clues—in effect, building an environment and space—and then lead inevitably and inexorably to that conclusion takes a lot of planning and literary skill (like a Hitchcock film) with the result of an incredibly satisfying denouement and overall conclusion. I don't know how you can do a sequel, because much of the joy from this series comes from revealing the characters. For a sequel you'd need to have a new cast to make it approach the same effectiveness. The one lingering question I have - which confused me at one point - the protagonists seem to be of Irish ancestry. Was there a reason for this (other than perhaps personal affirmation)?

2/16/25, 5:08 PM
@[nycboot](/user/show/131279) I'm glad you enjoyed...truly...and I didn't WANT people to really know Colt. HE didn't want people to know him. I think the sequel is going to be more how the survivors are learning to be themselves again and the whole Olympic thing for Rocky and Colt. Luminark will bring in new heroes to break...and we've got others that can be toyed with...Braxton anyone? The names just sounded good to me...there was no thought. I'm German-Italian , so nothing from ancestry.
2/16/25, 4:51 PM
Are you continuing the story?