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6/1/21, 9:39 AM
We need more of this
6/1/21, 8:30 AM
Interesting, lets see how it goes
Daniel
6/1/21, 2:52 AM
wish the 'taking and corruption' took a bit longer dude I.J.S.
Pup Tyler
5/31/21, 10:38 PM
Very nice part. I would love to see the next one
5/31/21, 10:08 PM
Hot story, the dialogue is great. A modest criticism though, there are some grammar and punctuation issues that're pretty pervasive. Excessive commas and exclamation points, some issues with paragraphs that lead me to lose track of who's speaking. Small fixable issues in an otherwise great story
5/31/21, 8:34 PM
@ArdanWolfe Oh that hit the spot! Like three times today alone! LOL Thank you for a very satisfying chapter and as always, I look forward to the next part.

5/31/21, 10:02 PM
haha I'm very glad to hear, I just write as the scene unfolds to me. I was nervous about this chapter at first but I think it definitely picked up 😁@Uncle Arctos
Marc
5/31/21, 8:36 PM
Great story! I particularly love the description of the i mind control.
Lakritz24
5/31/21, 8:26 PM
The story is exiting, but short. Think further, and writhe! Jo.Jo.ZE.
5/31/21, 6:42 PM
Cant wait fornext.
Frap
5/31/21, 5:36 PM
YES! This is my favorite story from mcstories.com soooooo happy you've brought it here. PLEASE Keep it going