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Sheared Hog
5/30/21, 3:30 PM
Beautiful!
Daniel
5/30/21, 3:29 PM
even hotter the second time around - should be a mini series on Here TV , Please write more dude I.J.S.
5/30/21, 3:22 PM
I hope to see more
Daniel
5/30/21, 2:40 PM
incredibly hot re-visit dude ! I.J.S.
5/30/21, 1:54 PM
Did he send in his assignment? I couldn’t tell. Great start! I’m excited to read more.
5/30/21, 11:18 AM
This seems promising, I hope this story goes as well as the others
5/30/21, 11:08 AM
wow,this was an intense binge-reading Session. I just love your stuff. Can't wait to see what you write next
Evan
5/30/21, 7:47 AM
I have really been enjoying this series. I've gotten lost along the way though. All the characters I cared about are gone in what I think is memory rewriting and I don't understand what's happening.

5/30/21, 10:13 AM
@Evan I appreciate the criticism. From my rough outline, Daniel will dream for one more chapter, then back to reality. I like very slow burn stories, hence this dream being like 3 whole parts. I like leaving some things up to interpretation, and what better way to do that than through a dream? I'd like to hear more on any parts you find confusing. Yes, Daniel's memory is being rewritten. He never dated Mildred in college, therefore he doesn't need to work at his father's company to get away from her. All his business knowledge is going away, and his focus on mysteries is growing, perfect for an amateur detective. Daniel had a very lonely childhood, and doesn't connect well with his parents. Suddenly here, he has a twin and his father works from home, always around.
5/30/21, 9:54 AM
and in the end Cody got what he wanted all along. I love a good Lovestory
5/30/21, 9:44 AM
The English is really good, just some tiny mistakes. I have seen native English speakers do far worse!