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5/14/21, 10:38 PM
Will this become a series?

5/14/21, 11:01 PM
@darkblade2814 - Yes it will be :) Four chapters are written, working on the 5th now.

5/14/21, 11:10 PM
@sb jb mc cool, looking forewords to more

5/16/21, 1:14 PM
@sb jb mcThank you!
5/16/21, 12:45 AM
Great work as always, Derek! A very hot story. Loved your creative twist on the Twilight Zone.

5/16/21, 5:25 AM
Thanks @Hypnoguy67 :) I suspect we'll get to visit this universe many times, this is something I've been considering for a while.

5/16/21, 12:54 PM
Consider me along for the ride, @Derek Williams. Looking forward to future chapters!
5/16/21, 7:48 AM
ohh I cant wait for the next part. This is so good

5/16/21, 12:40 PM
@jade I'm happy to hear you've enjoyed this part of the story! :)
Evan
5/16/21, 11:19 AM
I enjoyed the story, though I felt sorry for Tom. Lex becoming mean rather than devoted was unexpected, that's on me but it got in the way of my full enjoyment of the story. I think that betrayal was a surprise for Tom too. I also enjoyed the collared Lex converting Tom to join him in pupdom.
Cock thief
5/16/21, 11:15 AM
I love seeing how Jake is being tortured by his new body. But id really love to see how Brad is enjoying his new life.
5/16/21, 11:04 AM
I can't wait to read more!
5/14/21, 7:44 PM
Just reread this chapter and leaving a comment as promised. I think what I like most about this story is the slow build of Renslo submitting to the the different enchantments. And the really sly way to get him to disrobe to become an offering for Charroweir. Charroweir himself is a delightful character. I'd love to learn more about his background as well. I like that, while he's the villain of this piece, I don't really feel like he's EVIL. I also appreciate the dragon background you gave in one of the above comments. I'm currently building a world in my head and may have to borrow some of this.

5/16/21, 8:40 AM
@Proteus Thank you SO much for commenting! i really love hearing what readers enjoy about my stories so i can continue to improve. Renslo didn't know WHAT he was blundering into when he decided to rob this dragon. Charroweir is so much fun for me as a writer because you're right, even by standards of protagonists and antagonists, Charroweir has a) done some really fucked up ship b) failed to come across as actually evil, just 'i'm a dragon of course i can fuck with you insignificant bipeds. it's like playing the blanket prank on dogs.' if you do choose to use some or all of my dragon lore or want more details on it, please let me know!
Anonymous
5/16/21, 7:45 AM
Please continue! Best story I have read in a long time!
archer19cm
5/15/21, 10:58 PM
Your story didn't fit the predictable or the formula format, as these seem to do. I was enthralled after the first chapter and followed each chapter with growing admiration and excitement with your writing style; and your ability to capture in word, the most exquisite relational details, whilst following Willem and Jake's journey. Waiting for the final eleventh chapter, I re-read the series to soak up the storyline once again before reading the conclusion. I was not disappointed as I read the conclusion. The story was fresh and vibrant in my mind and made the ending of the story more impactful and satisfying. You touched all of my buttons in this story ... and for that I thank you. I do hope you will continue with another story soon.

5/16/21, 6:31 AM
@archer19cm Thank you for coming on the journey with me! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it so much. I will definitely write another story soon!
5/16/21, 3:57 AM
Great story once again. It does make me wonder if the host or storyteller or whatever you have decided to call him, took his phone back at the end, or if Sam got to keep it and potentially continue making changes to Ethan. Either way, this was hot, and I like the "be careful what you wish for" aspect of it. Well done, good sir!

5/16/21, 5:32 AM
I only sort-of figured that out @Proteus. Like I mentioned in another comment, the phone was originally going to end up in the ocean. I’m the as-written continuity, Sam keeps the phone, making tweaks to Ethan as he goes. He tweaks himself too, explaining his rapid rise to stardom, but he does it very carefully, since he’s got Ethan as a cautionary tale. Brandi ends up as Sam’s agent. At some point, Sam completely forgets the phone exists and it fades from existence. Ethan never totally forgets, but he can’t use it anyway.