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SC Walker
5/13/21, 7:43 PM
I loved this story. Throughout my writing one thing I have always struggled with is crafting that balance of real, human emotion, character development, and filthy sex. I admire you so much for doing something that I have been striving towards. I'm partially jealous, but also inspired to push myself further in my own writing. I think one key strength of your writing is your ability to show, rather than tell. An example being Willem's parents' reaction towards him - you never once say "Mom is like this towards Willem, Dad is like this.", but just through their dialogue you understand their personalities and relationships. I hope you continue writing, and I would love to chat more about the "craft" if you'd be willing. I feel like I could learn a lot from you. -SC (Also the fact that you wrote 11 chapters in 1 month is just mind-boggling to me, I don't know how you do it!)

5/13/21, 11:30 PM
@SC Walker I get jealous of other people's writing SO OFTEN and it always motivates me to push myself as well. Also my work writing (I work as a freelance writer) was pretty slow this month so this was basically all I worked on lol. I'd definitely be down to chat! Private message me on my profile and I can email you.
5/13/21, 11:00 PM
that was fun, who is next, the security guards?
5/13/21, 10:26 PM
I hope this series keep going

5/13/21, 10:38 PM
I think it will @darkblade2814, but I'm not going to write it the way I'd write a normal series. This is something I hope to revisit every so often, when I get the feeling a one-off story would fit the universe.

5/13/21, 10:55 PM
@Derek Williams Yes, I don't mind this series as a side project
5/13/21, 10:16 PM
i love the framing device of this being like a gay episode of the twilight zone. all my fave themes are here too, obliviousness, dumbing down, and hot guys who can't keep their hands off of one another. excellently written and steamy. Another one to add to the faves!

5/13/21, 10:37 PM
Thank you @Mind Labyrinth! I wanted something I could use as an anthology series, and given my predilection for twist endings and my love for classic sci-fi, this seemed ideal. Thanks for faving!
5/13/21, 10:13 PM
[insert "Play FFXIV now with free trial up to Heavensward" joke here]
5/13/21, 10:05 PM
Holy *fuck*, dude that is incredibly hot.
5/13/21, 9:19 PM
I really love this story you're creating. The way you describe Jeses fall each time is just beyond amazing, the power dynamics you set up are epic, and I fall into extreme lust with every hypnotic character you write. Particularly enjoying Charles as a potential hypnotic rival for Dennis, can't wait to see how that competition pans out! please keep it up, its amazing work!

5/13/21, 9:26 PM
@Sboy9416 The comment is much appreciated. I am very much enjoying the story as well. Charles was a random, but great addition to the story. At least me and you can agree on that. And I definitely have ideas for their rivalry, and surely more to come.
Anonymous
5/13/21, 8:55 PM
this was such a great story and I loved reading it
5/13/21, 7:25 PM
Left me wanting more. Like meeting the uncle.
rwriter51
5/13/21, 6:48 PM
Awesome story. It would be great to see some actual sex with his buddies.