Recent Comments

5/13/21, 10:37 AM
This is brilliant. You have a talent for really weaving the emotional journey of these characters and putting the tension in their lives on display. Seriously, great work, and thank you *so fucking much* for sharing it with us!

5/13/21, 12:32 PM
@Dace Thank you!!! I was so emotionally invested in this story, to be honest. I've thought about these characters every day, all day for the last month. I'm so glad you enjoyed!
5/13/21, 10:30 AM
I'll echo the screenplay comments. Reads like a movieand a good one! This was such an enjoyable series, you're a fantastic writer. Thanks so much!

5/13/21, 12:30 PM
@GiveInToTheMusk thank you so much! I've appreciated your comments every step of the way.
5/13/21, 12:22 PM
Thanks all - glad you guys are enjoying the story. Just posted #3. Still more to be told.
5/13/21, 10:56 AM
Welcome back
5/13/21, 10:36 AM
so glad you're back to writing again :) can't wait to see more from you
Anonymous
5/13/21, 10:33 AM
Great series so far!
Anonymous
5/13/21, 10:32 AM
Loved it!
Anonymous
5/13/21, 10:18 AM
very good the game also sounds like this game app that doubles as an workout program
5/13/21, 7:54 AM
I loved the premise here, and the writing was clear enough that even a non-gaymer like me could mostly follow what was happening (although I got a little confused whether the nudity was happening in game or in real life). I just wish that the secondary characters had been more developed; you tell us that Carlo gets his friends addicted to the game, but you don't really show us that.
Anonymous
5/13/21, 7:54 AM
Your story is very hot and interesting. The brothers should have their story more. And I also want to know what happen to their father.