Recent Comments

5/13/21, 10:30 AM
I'll echo the screenplay comments. Reads like a movieand a good one! This was such an enjoyable series, you're a fantastic writer. Thanks so much!

5/13/21, 12:30 PM
@GiveInToTheMusk thank you so much! I've appreciated your comments every step of the way.
5/13/21, 12:22 PM
Thanks all - glad you guys are enjoying the story. Just posted #3. Still more to be told.
5/13/21, 10:56 AM
Welcome back
5/13/21, 10:36 AM
so glad you're back to writing again :) can't wait to see more from you
Anonymous
5/13/21, 10:33 AM
Great series so far!
Anonymous
5/13/21, 10:32 AM
Loved it!
Anonymous
5/13/21, 10:18 AM
very good the game also sounds like this game app that doubles as an workout program
5/13/21, 7:54 AM
I loved the premise here, and the writing was clear enough that even a non-gaymer like me could mostly follow what was happening (although I got a little confused whether the nudity was happening in game or in real life). I just wish that the secondary characters had been more developed; you tell us that Carlo gets his friends addicted to the game, but you don't really show us that.
Anonymous
5/13/21, 7:54 AM
Your story is very hot and interesting. The brothers should have their story more. And I also want to know what happen to their father.
Haruspex
4/22/21, 10:25 PM
ks is kinsey scale; cs is cock size, L is...no clue!

4/22/21, 10:26 PM
@Haruspex probally libido

Haruspex
4/23/21, 3:02 AM
@darkblade2814 See, that's what I thought? But it goes over 100 and I would have thought it would have been percentage based or something.

5/13/21, 6:02 AM
@Haruspex Liters? initial value is too high though.