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Anonymous
5/7/21, 3:11 PM
Nice! I was kind of wondering how you could reintroduce the more blatantly hypno aspects of the story, since Jese seemed good and corrupted in the real world. Both the new setting and the possible hypno-rivalry between Dennis and Charles are good ideas to continue the story!

5/7/21, 6:40 PM
@ The Charles things just sort of came to me mid writing, as most things do, lol. But will definitely give the story some longevity, along with a few turns. Its an interesting relationship to explore.
nycboot
5/7/21, 5:53 PM
I really like this series and I've been trying to think why. After enjoying the Mind Gear sections too much and fantasizing about what I want to happen, I think it comes down to my like for the contrast between the two worlds -that Jese loves going into Mind Gear and is much more uncomfortable in the real world. At the outset of the story, I took an immediate dislike to Jese - seemed like a typical non-communicative anti-social teenager with little sense of how to interact with people. But of course as it goes on one realizes that if nothing else, Jese likes experiencing new adventures and likes sex - and I as a reader love to see Jese slipping so gradually, and getting confused between the fantasy and real worlds. I do miss the fantastic unreality of the first section; let's see what the ring and bracelet do for this section. Good luck. :)

5/7/21, 6:38 PM
@nycboot I also enjoy the jump from real to virtual. Which there will be more of, of course. But I'm sure we havn't seen the end of Master Azir and Star World. Nor the fantastic opportunities available thanks to its magical world. Gentlemen's Club will just be a dive into another idea, but will have a purpose in terms of the story, naturally.
5/7/21, 6:00 PM
Very very hot story. Was a tiny bit confused how the jock "somehow" came off Dan without him dropping his shorts at the reception desk, but maybe he had a spare in his pocket? He seems to still be wearing his jock when he gets to the room and has to strip. Also he says that he's a shower not a grower but he's clearly *both* ha ha ha ha ha.
5/7/21, 2:46 PM
Very nicely done! I especially appreciated the whimsy of your line, "after a raid using their wits and athleticism, as well as some well-placed bribes, a grappling hook, and a reliably rowdy camel. To say nothing of the sex, which, hot :D

5/7/21, 5:36 PM
@Noam de Pluma. Thank you! I was trying to catch a little bit of that fun pulp feel before the intense stuff started. The camel ended up being more significant than originally planned, ha!
5/7/21, 5:20 PM
Will we see part 6?
Zai
5/7/21, 2:06 PM
Speedos are an all-time top pick for me when it comes to sexy clothing on hot, studly dudes. The ultra thin fabric that accentuates manly hips, bulging crotch, and round, firm ass is the stuff of (wet) dreams. That you had Jesse get utterly and completely owned by Ash AND his huge cock while both hunks were still wearing their Speedos was damn heat! Someday, I hope you return to not only this great story, but add new and exciting gay erotic fiction to this wondrous site. Take care, dude!

5/7/21, 2:35 PM
@Zai Not sure when the Island will make its return. I have thought of spinoffs, and returns. Just haven't really found something I really want to come back with yet. But otherwise I'm trying something a little different with Star World. Its not a realistic-esk island setting, but it provides a longterm plot for Jese to evolve with. Gentlemen's club, which will make its debut within the Star World story might be something you would be interested in. It was an idea I had been sitting for a while, my next "island".
5/7/21, 4:55 AM
Great work and i can help you with the M-Preg and Jessie is now a men?

5/7/21, 10:06 AM
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it. And I have two possible options for the pregnancy with one being they become parents of actually infants, or they develop into maturity inside Frank and are born at about 17-18. Oh and yes, Jessie's hybridization made him male.@Pan2109

5/7/21, 10:20 AM
@ArdanWolfe why not a mix of those two, have a infats and a moth or two you have a 16-17 And jessie is a man o woman?

5/7/21, 11:54 AM
Ah well that might work well, thank you for the suggestion. And Jessie is a man, all hybrids are male like the Alien's home race. @Pan2109
5/7/21, 11:15 AM
Wow wow wow men
5/7/21, 4:02 AM
Leaves me wanting MORE! Well done!

5/7/21, 4:10 AM
Oh definitely more to come, Eddie needs his story told. And I am trying to decide how Frank's pregnancy will work. Thank you so much for all your encouragement 😊@Papa Werebear

5/7/21, 6:22 AM
@ArdanWolfe I'm justs really enjoying this quirky take on biology, psychology, and family dynamics, sexual roles, dominance and submissiveness, hierarchy, loving and caring and what it means to be 'related' to one another. This whole thing is just very intriguing to me.

5/7/21, 10:13 AM
Again, thank you so much. It's amazing to get such positive feedback, especially from one of the authors who I really enjoy reading. 😊@Papa Werebear
5/7/21, 6:25 AM
Man I can't wait to see what happens with Eddie and how he interacts with Billy. I'm already thinking about the hot possibilities and it's got me all riled up!

5/7/21, 10:08 AM
Thank you for the enthusiasm ☺. I am really enjoying how this story is coming along, and hope it continues to bring excitement @Uncle Arctos