Recent Comments

Anonymous
5/3/21, 11:43 PM
I was confused by this though... if he drank the tonic himself... how would that get him back to the apothecary? Did he misunderstand the ritual and think he was supposed to drink it? If so, it would still be him trying to do things with his intended. How does Elio become the intended? And, if he was interested in Elio... why did he need the tonic in the first place? --- sorry.. just a continuity thing that didn't make sense to me. I thought the story and premise of the soldier affected was great though.

5/4/21, 12:29 PM
Doran did return for a reason, but that got snipped during editing and I hadn't considered the hole in the narrative. If I can get a part 2 out I'll include those passages for context.
5/4/21, 12:06 PM
Love the smoldering, almost fairy-tale-esque storytelling, the play of desire and denial, the beautifully rounded characters, the burgeoning world-building. Amazing work, my dude.
5/4/21, 11:55 AM
Hi, and Thanks! While there's going to be total immobilization in (at least) the next chapter, I just didn't know what category this fit into best.
John F
5/4/21, 11:53 AM
Hi Swizzington, Hope you are well. Really liked this story and it did read different to your others (which I loved just as much). I just wanted to say thank you for taking the time to write all of these and that I am very much looking forward to reading anything else you write, in (hopefully) the near future :p Thanks, JF
Tim tucker
5/4/21, 11:50 AM
Really enjoyed this story. Was checking in to see if there would be an update, though looking at the other comments and how long ago they were asked and seeing no answer, this is unlikely?
Anonymous
5/4/21, 9:56 AM
WAIT. Are you *the* PupAmp??
5/4/21, 7:39 AM
Anxious to see where it goes.....
5/4/21, 6:46 AM
I liked this chapter a lot, although I wish we could have seen more of the father recruiting Hazim.
5/4/21, 6:28 AM
Props for all the North Dakota local color, including NAIA school Dickinson State. Curious how the freeze theme as the main theme comes into in play in the next chapters -- obviously it is not about the Peace Garden state's cold weather -- maybe could explain how the cops get captured.
Revenge
5/4/21, 3:50 AM
Man, this is actually cute and so hot at the same time hahah I love it and cant wait to see more