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4/17/21, 5:30 PM
Not your best chapter...

4/19/21, 8:53 PM
@jkstrapme Sadly have to agree. I want to preface and say that I think the overall story and concept are still pretty good, but I think that given some of the feedback that were provided from the last chapter, this chapter tries to rectify some plot holes and explain certain things in too direct a fashion that makes them feel a bit out of place. for example, I actually like the idea that he had somehow “stored away“ his memories, but I feel like that should’ve been introduced a few chapters ago and/or the ending of this chapter should’ve been delayed by at least one more chapter. I think it’s pretty clear at this point that there’s no going back (ie Willem is just gonna be gay), and I think that tension is completely gone. So I at this point, I don’t think there’s any reason to try to address any of the inner turmoil there, but more so how he may come to accept it and how he is going to adapt (eg coming out, etc.) I think moving forward, the thing that would be best to focus on is the evolving relationship and dynamic between the two main characters. I think any of the characters that happen from here on out should ideally serve as a reflection back to the core relationship and how Willem is evolving. for example, in this chapter, I think it would’ve been more striking if Willem had been confronted with this guy as a path he could have gone down had things not changed. I think one of the things that he should’ve taken away from this is that he doesn’t want to be like that, whether or not he is gay or straight. Anyway, I don’t wanna be too negative here, because like I said I still think there’s a lot to love here. To the author, if you want someone to look things over before you submit, I would be more than happy to do so.
kuro
4/19/21, 8:27 PM
I'm so glad that you've decided to continue writing this fic - I continue to be infinitely charmed by Charley's Erotic Adventures. Pretty much every line of this chapter had me delighted; I had a grin the entire time: right down to Charley breaking the translator engram due to his incoherency. I'm very much excited to see where you take both this fic, and any stories you might choose to write in the future!
4/19/21, 6:17 PM
Loved it!!!
4/19/21, 5:26 PM
Fantastic series! Thank you for making it. I can't wait for future chapters!
Alex Lat
4/19/21, 12:22 PM
i liked a lot, i also look to your tumblr and liked a lot of your writing, and wanna see how will you develop this world, be it in the individualities and personalities and in the resistance

4/19/21, 3:18 PM
@Alex Lat wow thank you! That means so much :D Yep I've already drawn a mind map of who to introduce (there are tons!) The resistance will play a big part in this as well, hopefully I'll be able to do justice :)

4/19/21, 3:18 PM
@Alex Lat wow thank you! That means so much :D Yep I've already drawn a mind map of who to introduce (there are tons!) The resistance will play a big part in this as well, hopefully I'll be able to do justice :)
4/19/21, 2:29 PM
Wow. I was not expecting this to ever get a finale. Or one that was so hot. I loved the sex and loved the fantasy fulfillment Bill finally got, all around, while still having to do whatever anyone tells him. His wish about things going his way turned out very well tho.
4/19/21, 10:36 AM
I'm so glad for this EPIC conclusion. I am really happy you decided to finish it! It was awesome!
Anonymous
4/19/21, 8:30 AM
I can't help but keep coming back to this one, SUPER hot. it's a little short but honestly it gets the job done so well that I prefer it this way so I don't feel guilty for not reading it all after getting off. AMAZING WORK keep it up
4/19/21, 6:11 AM
loving this series
4/19/21, 6:05 AM
I'd love to know how these guys are being controlled.