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4/12/21, 3:54 PM
still one of the best story here. wish this was continued.
4/12/21, 2:44 PM
Keep the chapters "cumming". I'll see myself out now...
4/12/21, 2:09 PM
A well written chapter. I'm really looking forward to next one. I hope you make Craig's Marcus Master since Marcus is a homophobe, make Marcus aware of what he's doing to him and can't do anything to stop him to teach him a lesson.
Apr 11, 2021
4/12/21, 1:08 PM
What a great start! Looking forward to the invasion of his sons, hopefully it's coming rather sooner than later! But one phrase triggered me, it was the mention of the scuba diving that reminded me of "The Zindar Invasion". There you left space for a possible sequel with his father or maybe even an added brother...;) hopefully it was a small hint for a sequel, but I think it was probably just a coincidence... But please go on with that story it is really great.
Anonymous
4/12/21, 5:39 AM
i am loving the story so far, and i will love to see some grow jame's grow, and probably some worship

4/12/21, 12:57 PM
Well, I won't give anything away, but I think you'll like where we're heading!
nycboot
4/12/21, 1:51 AM
Usually I don't go for over-the-top sex in a violent mode. But you've made the mortal so sympathetic, and it's so easy to empathize with his history, that reading the revenge that the demon visits upon Jason and Dominic feel incredibly satisfying. And strangely, just as the mortal kid learns to enjoy the hard sex, so too the reader is drawn into it. Very good and rewarding work!

4/12/21, 12:56 PM
@nycboot It's a tricky one to level out for us too! We love the concept of sexual redemption and when that motivation is being fed on or intensified by a demonic creature - it seemed natural that it's going to get a bit hardcore. MisterXIX and I have had discussions that have boiled down to "how far is too far" and I don't think you're ever going to see anything truly revolting - that's not really our thing - but pleasure and pain are closely linked!
4/11/21, 4:44 PM
Yep, definitely glad I kept on reading this series. You're doing a good job at evoking the driven-by-the-victims nature of the transformations taking place, and the sex is pretty darn hot - not least because of the literal hellfire. On a very personal and subjective level, I'm kind of disappointed you did a full reversal on Dom! I was hoping he'd become an insatiable vers, a guy who's unbelievably dominant and capable of fucking order into others while also constantly craving dick and every so often giving in to exert his power by riding their dicks to oblivion because he just has to scratch that itch deep inside. What I'm saying is, don't rob him of the slutty hole Sam gave him! From a writing standpoint, only one thing jumps out at me to watch: passive voice. It doesn't happen often, but when it does, it subtly slows down the narrative and robs it of a tiny bit of impact. Two examples from this chapter are "...shoes soon becoming drenched" and "getting torn apart". Could easily be rephrased to "soon drenching his shoes" and "tore him apart". I really have to watch for this in my own writing as well. A rule I try to make for myself is to look for any use of the verbs to be, to get, and to have. They're major culprits in creating needlessly lengthy sentences and verb constructions ("he was trying to have gotten laid"), and there's almost always a better, more specific option available anyway (he was feeling horny --> he felt horny --> his cock shot to full hardness, dripping and eager to fuck). Keep up the great work!

4/12/21, 12:54 PM
@Noam de Pluma I know that when we wrote this, MisterXIX and I spoke for a while about keeping Dom's changes or not and it was a tricky one to decide on. I think we shared your desire to see him embrace his slutty side but still be dominant, but we felt that we didn't want create new characters at the expense of previously set-up ones... we felt we'd run into the area of each transformation taking the path of the corrupted making their sexual partner their inferior... which, believe me, we have a lot of ideas for - but Dom has his part to play in the story as he is! Thank you for your critique as well, we appreciate your feedback and will certainly look out for instances of passive voice.
nycboot
4/12/21, 2:31 AM
I keep hoping that there will be some sexual energy exchanged between James (the mortal) and the demon. :)

4/12/21, 12:48 PM
@nycboot Well, I won't give anything away, but I don't think you'll be disappointed!
4/12/21, 10:10 AM
Awwww. The ending actually makes it seem like the guys are going to bond. I like when stories have surprisingly emotional twists and turns. And note how none of Willem's so-called "bros" have checked on him...Jake seems like he could be a real friend. :)
Anonymous
4/12/21, 8:30 AM
So excited for the next chapter