I cannot wait for the next chapter, I hope Marky's boss is the one to see Marky and demotes him down to Zane's secretary.

Wow! I really enjoy Speedo clad sex; that extremely thin, silky feel material tightly wrapped around one's hips, ass and bulge. When a lover/fucker plows your manpussy as you both wear the racer briefs, the mix of steamy, aroused flesh and lycra/spandex co-mingling to bring you to the heights of near depraved pleasures. As he OWNS your most intimate area(s), turning your ass into an erotic playground. And you, dear author, wrote that so very, very, very, very well in this chapter! Thank you! Ash made Jese HIS BITCH WHORE BOTTOM BOI-TOY SLUT SO DECIDEDLY, SO CUNNINGLY. Tasty delights abounded!

I'm really liking this series. Definitely one of my favorites in a good while. My only feedback would be to request that you spend a little more time describing the physical sensations Willem feels, especially near/during climax, and also maybe having slightly longer sex scenes. When you say stuff like, "The top came and Willem's cock shot in response," it's a hot visual but it feels more like 'showing' vs 'telling' when it comes to Willem's experience. I really love descriptions of physical sensations. What did Willem feel like as he came, and where did he feel it? Did it feel like a relief of pressure? A loss of control, or perhaps empowering somehow? You did this really well when you had Willem noticing after his second or third time that he didn't feel the same shame he felt previously. I would love if you brought a little bit of that description to his climaxes. The rest of my comment is not really feedback as much as some hot ideas I wanted to share. I would find it pretty hot if Willem came multiple times in a session, not just when the top finishes. Or, if he didn't finish at all, but realized he had no interest in finishing himself off without a cock in him - or if he felt completely satisfied just by being bred... please don't feel constrained to the formula of "sex starts, change position, then the top cums and that makes the bottom cum in response." When the bottom seems to only finish in response to the top finishing, IMO it sends a message that he's only cumming because the curse makes him cum when a top finishes inside him - rather than it being because of the raw pleasure he's feeling. Some other ideas I've been having (but please only consider them if it feels natural in the story to you): * have the curse escalate by having the pink glow not fade until Willem's completely milked the top dry. * Allow somehow for the curse to be satisfied (and for Willem to feel satisfied) by only performing oral (and of course the top doesn't even think about reciprocating). * Or, alternatively, Willem accidentally blows a guy to completion, and they're too tired to fuck him, so Willem's forced to squirm / receive another punishment because it takes too long for them to recover * Have a punishment involve nipple growth and sensitivity increase. * Have the pink glow fall on another total bottom, forcing Willem to somehow turn them, or perhaps more body modifications that make him more irresistable to top Again, really liking this series. I've wanked to each chapter, and some multiple times :) My feedback comes with best intentions and gratitude. I haven't been this excited about a series in a while.

still one of the best story here. wish this was continued.

Keep the chapters "cumming". I'll see myself out now...

A well written chapter. I'm really looking forward to next one. I hope you make Craig's Marcus Master since Marcus is a homophobe, make Marcus aware of what he's doing to him and can't do anything to stop him to teach him a lesson.

What a great start! Looking forward to the invasion of his sons, hopefully it's coming rather sooner than later! But one phrase triggered me, it was the mention of the scuba diving that reminded me of "The Zindar Invasion". There you left space for a possible sequel with his father or maybe even an added brother...;) hopefully it was a small hint for a sequel, but I think it was probably just a coincidence... But please go on with that story it is really great.

i am loving the story so far, and i will love to see some grow jame's grow, and probably some worship

Usually I don't go for over-the-top sex in a violent mode. But you've made the mortal so sympathetic, and it's so easy to empathize with his history, that reading the revenge that the demon visits upon Jason and Dominic feel incredibly satisfying. And strangely, just as the mortal kid learns to enjoy the hard sex, so too the reader is drawn into it. Very good and rewarding work!

Yep, definitely glad I kept on reading this series. You're doing a good job at evoking the driven-by-the-victims nature of the transformations taking place, and the sex is pretty darn hot - not least because of the literal hellfire. On a very personal and subjective level, I'm kind of disappointed you did a full reversal on Dom! I was hoping he'd become an insatiable vers, a guy who's unbelievably dominant and capable of fucking order into others while also constantly craving dick and every so often giving in to exert his power by riding their dicks to oblivion because he just has to scratch that itch deep inside. What I'm saying is, don't rob him of the slutty hole Sam gave him! From a writing standpoint, only one thing jumps out at me to watch: passive voice. It doesn't happen often, but when it does, it subtly slows down the narrative and robs it of a tiny bit of impact. Two examples from this chapter are "...shoes soon becoming drenched" and "getting torn apart". Could easily be rephrased to "soon drenching his shoes" and "tore him apart". I really have to watch for this in my own writing as well. A rule I try to make for myself is to look for any use of the verbs to be, to get, and to have. They're major culprits in creating needlessly lengthy sentences and verb constructions ("he was trying to have gotten laid"), and there's almost always a better, more specific option available anyway (he was feeling horny --> he felt horny --> his cock shot to full hardness, dripping and eager to fuck). Keep up the great work!