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Apr 11, 2021
4/11/21, 6:03 PM
Hmm. loving the promised idea, will follow. Thanks having similar inspiration moments, its in the forum. 10 dads. Not a direct suggestion for this or any of your writing but would like you to comment.
4/11/21, 4:40 PM
Yooo the stuff with the gaze was amazing. I think that what you did with Christine was good too, despite some of the comments.
4/11/21, 3:40 PM
Thinking a hot guy was at his mercy and then getting turned into a fucktoy was really hot. At first, I couldn't figure out the connection between chapter 1 and chapter 2, but the connection is nicely done.
4/6/21, 11:18 PM
Very interesting setup here - this can go in a lot of fun directions. I know you've already written some more chapters, so this is late, but if I have any constructive criticism to offer it would be dialogue. The demon's lines made enough sense as he would have a grander way of speaking, the the mortal read very much as an info-dump to me, more like the authors providing us with info than a real person who phrases things in ways that suggest character and personality. Telling, not showing. I love the premise however and will absolutely be reading onward. Thank you for taking the time to get this written and published!

4/11/21, 3:10 PM
Hi @Noam de Pluma! Thanks for your comment. When MisterXIX and I started writing this story, it was simply us typing out a section at a time without any real idea of plot or direction. We were writing to challenge and suprise each other and so this first chapter, following a bit of a tidy-up is almost an example of improvisational "yes and" style writing, so I can completely agree with your opinion. We had no idea of where we were going or what we were doing, but it's been really fun to write with MisterXIX and weave a story together... we have the remaining chapters outlined and we hope you'll enjoy where it goes!

4/11/21, 3:26 PM
@HunkLover Ah makes sense. I did read the next couple of chapters and the dialogue had a more natural feel to it. The series took a bit of a darker turn than I usually go for, but you've got me hooked and I will be finishing it off :)
3/4/21, 10:47 PM
This is amazing! So fucking hot and still has a great story. Great work, I hope to see more of it!

4/11/21, 3:13 PM
@Wulfgrimm Wow. Thank you so much for your feedback, it really means a lot! We’re busily working away on the upcoming chapters and we can’t wait to share them with you!
3/4/21, 10:11 PM
Holy fuck I cannot wait to see where this goes. Well done.

4/11/21, 3:13 PM
Well, thank you very much @Alpha Artemis! That's very kind of you to say!
Jack
3/4/21, 8:52 PM
Holy shit. This is fucking hot!

4/11/21, 3:13 PM
@Jack Thank you. We aim to please!
Martin
3/4/21, 9:59 PM
This is truly an amazing story. One of the best I've read recently. I'm not so much for vengeance and violence, but if it's written that well and hot, I can't help but to enjoy it... and pay dutifully with a sacrifice of my seed.

4/11/21, 3:12 PM
Hey @Martin, I thought I'd take the opportunity to use the new 'Reply' function and thank you for your comment. We're trying to find a way to write a story unlike something we've seen before, whilst appealing to a lot of tastes and kinks... so glad you enjoyed it!
4/11/21, 3:06 PM
Very hot, with a nice and unexpected twist.
4/11/21, 2:10 PM
******I had to read this chapter first**** because of the synopsis lol. ill be diving into the first part now! Great writing!