This story literally kept me awake last night. I read it, came, then spent two hours lying awake unable to sleep because I was thinking about it. I had to come back to the site, read other stuff, come AGAIN, and then I could sleep. My favourite thing about this story is the way the reader works through Elijah's changing thought process alongside him. I have never seen such a huge personality shift as the selfless/selfish turn arranged in such a hot way. Managing to express that in a way that made sense AND was super erotic was some really great work. The emphasis on the wrong-ness of it, and how we continually returned to a change in character that Elijah was aware of for the rest of the story made it incredibly hot. I think what some folks here in the comments are picking up on with regard to the descriptors was symptomatic of a lack of physicality in the story. We spend a lot of time in Elijah's head seeing his reactions to changes. What we could use a bit more of in this story is to dive in to the physical changes taking place whenever we get outside of his head. And I understand why that didn't happen here: this story is long! (and also that doesn't necessarily seem to be what specifically gets you off, which is totally fair) Unlike in Texting Twinks, where a lot of physical description was carried by the texts, in this story the characters are more often present in a scene, meaning that readers expect the prose to carry the weight of describing how their behaviour is shifting in scene. It doesn't have a serious impact on reading the story (more physical description might actually have harmed my experience in this story, it's so well balanced as it is) but it's what I noticed. This is definitely a new favourite story of mine, and I can't believe I didn't read it during the contest! I do have a question: was this meant to read as Les Miserables fanfiction? The character group really felt like Les Amis de l'ABC to me, and now I want to do a version of this with those character dynamics.

i loved this

Grrrr. Who's the guy that didn't pick up the phone and rescue his boi. I just wanna know. *\*cracks knuckles**

This story was utterly amazing

This is just so good. I wish the dad will be turned into a full slave

Heres to another 99 chapters! ;)

Pretty sexy, the style is interesting, but I didn't feel that much the idea that Tony left himself grow prideful and stuck-up. Maybe it's because I don't watch more sport...

Oh my gosh I'm like a year late to the party, but I remember reading the first part of this story when it first came out and didn't realize there was a second part! I totally just binged the whole thing in one sitting lmao This is so good though I love your writing and can't wait to see what your next story is! I know you said you might do things with this story in the future, if you don't mind dropping any hints, will we maybe be seeing more of real Nathan in the future? My boy has really been put through the ringer and I just want good things for him.

For Mac's part, why not just make him gay and coming over for some fun from time to time, I think that is fair

That was great