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3/21/21, 4:01 PM
I think I recognise the style of this author, but I'll have to wait and see if I was right. I think it's great to see a story with a character accepting their (non-binary?) identity.

Anonymous
4/5/21, 6:43 PM
@Varlance If I am who you believed me to be, I'm touched that you know my style. If I am not who you believed me to be, I am equally touched that I could be mistaken for another author whom you are more familiar with. From the bottom of my heart, thank you!
4/5/21, 6:42 PM
more please!
Anonymous
3/20/21, 3:56 AM
i really like this. sexy, well written, and solid characterization considering the length of the story. plus some satisfying revenge and a tenderness that doesn't sacrifice the corruption theming. good job!!

Anonymous
4/5/21, 6:41 PM
@Thank you very much for your feedback and kind words! I appreciate you reading, commenting and rating.
3/28/21, 12:16 AM
Fuck me... this is one of the hottest stories I have ever read . not often that I blow my load multiple times to one story. Wanted this Story to just continue and continue and continue. love how it got progressively more and more Twisted and kinky

4/5/21, 6:14 PM
@Roughrubber Thanks so much! Glad you liked it
4/5/21, 3:46 PM
I would love to see where this could go. so many questions.... What is with that Mino guy? What do all the other friends look like. Do his friends have hot sons? The potential is enormous. Have fun! Hope you continue.
4/5/21, 2:43 PM
Really interested in what is coming and wishing to read it soon. Thanks for the story
4/5/21, 1:46 PM
Thank you for your comment. Yes, there's been a lot of plot to cover, but now that it's all explained, and the Pharaoh has returned more powerful than ever, we are back to the fun of the slow breaking of the will. Thank you for your suggestions too.
4/5/21, 1:38 PM
I'd stopped reading this series, just because the plot got a little too convoluted for me. But the description for this chapter caught my attention, and I'm glad I read it, because I was turned on by the President's relatively slow conversion and the way he was seduced by the promise to "Make Egypt Great Again" (so to speak). I hope that in subsequent chapters we get more detailed imagery of the men taking off their normal street clothes to don the Egyptian loincloths, because I think that's a really hot detail.
4/5/21, 10:30 AM
hope you come up with some more great stuff again!!
Apr 5, 2021
4/5/21, 9:41 AM
Congrats on publishing your first story here, Praisego! I think this one has a lot of good elements, including an exciting cliffhanger at the end. But my main recommendation would be to add a bit more character development, especially when it comes to the narrator, Jimmy. I get the sense that we're supposed to sympathize and even identify with Jimmy, but I found that hard to do. Frankly, I thought that Jimmy seemed like a sociopath; when he finds his friend and roommate in a vulnerable state, he immediately starts thinking of ways to rape him. If we're intended to root for Jimmy, it might have worked better if he spent some time talking to Steven while he was under trance, then discovered that Steven had always been attracted to him, but just too afraid to act on that attraction. But for me, the more interesting option would just be to lean into Jimmy's creepiness, to make him a self-pitying and self-justifying incel who rationalizes taking advantage of his hot jock roommate. That would give the reader even more reason to come back for Chapter 2 and see if Steven can turn the tables on Jimmy.