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4/4/21, 10:57 AM
So fun! Can't wait to see what sort of fun he can have with Zeth!
Jeffery
4/4/21, 10:54 AM
Such a good story so far. Really look forward to reading chapter 3 Do you have any suggestions to stories that are similar to yours?? Or any suggested authors?
4/4/21, 10:25 AM
I was not expecting this, but I love it! He even uses his own hypnosis skills for my favorite thing: making the target feel relaxed and safe. Excellent series, dude!
4/4/21, 8:31 AM
Oh,I need MORE,please
4/4/21, 7:26 AM
This is good! More usage of the dad please!
4/4/21, 6:50 AM
one of my favourites to date.
4/4/21, 3:16 AM
theres something really awesome about short, simple stories like this. this is incredible, and i hope you continue to write more fiction here. have a great day

LthrBikerThug
4/4/21, 6:11 AM
@AClosetBear Thanks for the compliment! It really improves my mood seeing good feedback on my writing.
4/4/21, 4:15 AM
Your fetishes and desires come through clearly. I think I would have liked it more if it were more personal. Instead of saying "YOU", I would have been more interested in a first hand experience of "I found myself" or "I was aroused and delighted when my moan of pleasure came out as a bleating"... I guess in my case, I would have been envious and trying to imagine meself in your position. At least for me. I liked it a lot and hope you continue to experiment and share!!

LthrBikerThug
4/4/21, 6:10 AM
@Stroppy Author Noted. I do see that working better because of the theme of the story. I tend to do better at First Person and Third Person stories myself.
Kent
4/4/21, 5:56 AM
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Anonymous
4/4/21, 5:32 AM
absolutely wonderful, and extremely hot. this is rapidly becoming one of my favorite stories on this site lmao like many folks here, i'm a big fan of some good old fashioned dumbing down, and when you mostly read in one niche, you tend to get very used to a specific set of tropes. as the previous commenters said, you've really really helped make your story stand out, feel fresh, and add compelling contrast with the way charley's intelligence has risen and plummeted. plus, his reaction to it has been well written, sexy, and in character, even as that character has been modified yes, longer chapters would be really nice. who doesn't want more content? but at the same time, i do tend to see online authors burn themselves out by taking on too much. i'd rather you do what's best for your process, and in the meanwhile your writing and the story is good enough that any chapter length is just fine with me in terms of what i'd most like to see, your ideas all sound great! i think the order you wrote down makes the most sense to me, although i agree with nutiper that whatever works best for you is the way to go i'm really really excited to see more from you and to find out where this goes!!!