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Anonymous
4/4/21, 5:32 AM
absolutely wonderful, and extremely hot. this is rapidly becoming one of my favorite stories on this site lmao like many folks here, i'm a big fan of some good old fashioned dumbing down, and when you mostly read in one niche, you tend to get very used to a specific set of tropes. as the previous commenters said, you've really really helped make your story stand out, feel fresh, and add compelling contrast with the way charley's intelligence has risen and plummeted. plus, his reaction to it has been well written, sexy, and in character, even as that character has been modified yes, longer chapters would be really nice. who doesn't want more content? but at the same time, i do tend to see online authors burn themselves out by taking on too much. i'd rather you do what's best for your process, and in the meanwhile your writing and the story is good enough that any chapter length is just fine with me in terms of what i'd most like to see, your ideas all sound great! i think the order you wrote down makes the most sense to me, although i agree with nutiper that whatever works best for you is the way to go i'm really really excited to see more from you and to find out where this goes!!!
Apr 1, 2021
4/4/21, 5:24 AM
Really love how you made the main character into a muscle bottom slut. The way you described the change each week for him was really well written.
4/4/21, 3:55 AM
Humm I always skipped this story due to it's title. Never judge a book by it's cover they say, and they say right. I love it so far and look forward to reading the rest.
boi98229
4/4/21, 3:31 AM
I like the novel and very arousing mix of college student, professor, hypnosis, video recording, gang bang, blackmail, and call boy contract involved in the plot. It was particularly arousing how the professor with his hypnosis managed to confuse John enough that he wasn't even sure how or when his fetishes started. This confusion in John's mind so managed to weaken any argument John might try to make, and in so doing dramatically shifted power and control from John to the professor. Nicely done! So hot!
4/4/21, 3:14 AM
wth?
4/4/21, 1:50 AM
After seeing so many comments, I had to give this a try. Interesting first chapter - looking forward to seeing where this is going!
4/4/21, 1:06 AM
I don't mind the time it took you, thanks for finishing it, and I like the happy ending <3 About ideas to suggest... in the same universe. Well, I can suggest traits a story can contain... like straight to gay, role reversal (such as underling controlling the boss, son over dad, student over coach/principal, etc), feet, and mostly, big sub + small top (young nerdy vs old strong figure)... this are all my personal tastes so feel free to ignore them :) Concretes ideas... dunno, -A burglar brakes in the house of someone and ends up enslaved. -The son of this (I assume is) Aaron dude at the end spies on his dad and knows about it so he decides to use it to his advantage -A jock and his friends (one of them is the son of someone working on this company) tries to play a prank on some nerdy guy, lure him with the false excuse to study or help him with something or perhaps humiliate him... in any case, they are all ready in the house ready to pull it, he and his friends try it out using his dad pc and end up enslaved just in time for the nerd guy arriving at his house and... you know the rest. -A coworker finds about Aaron thing, maybe not a coworker but a guy for the cleaning service, and do something so he can enslave him instead. Karma~
4/3/21, 10:45 PM
Would love this verse to grow!!! Maybe other environments? At work/office? Maybe also with a guy and his sons, but the dad being the one sissified, and one of the younger sons aged? So many possibilities, such great material ;)
Anonymous
4/3/21, 10:31 PM
interesting development! I wonder how this changes the David's personality now that he seems to no longer have his powers?
4/3/21, 8:01 PM
oh super hot ending!!! this was very fun to read!