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4/1/21, 7:02 PM
I'm going to try to make future chapters longer -- I'm writing most of these on my phone, so they feel a lot longer than they actually are when I'm typing them up. I have four decently developed ideas (all of which I'd like to get to at some point) but feedback on what people want to see first would be appreciated. Currently my ideas are: 1) Tyzon and Charley keep messing around. 2) Charley does some exploration while Tyzon is out. 3) Early morning workout with Zethro and Crage. 4) Musical jam session with Yan.

Nutiper
4/1/21, 8:01 PM
@bluesuedewho Ooh I did notice they were short, but they were damn hot, so I didn't mind. I feel like the ideas in the order you listed them could be a good plan! It'd be great to get more of Tyzon and Charley off the bat. Otherwise I guess it could feel like getting blue-balled (no pun intended, ha) since their dynamic is so hot and the story keeps edging Charley to the brink of fully "exploring" Tyzon — so, I mean, it feels like there's definitely more for them to do before we move on, and like there could be more scenes with just the two of them messing around. But after that, it would definitely be fun to see Charley exploring on his own! Kinda feeling out his situation, discovering new things about himself... And then, afterward, it would be a refreshing change of pace to have Charley do things with the other guys (the workout; the jam session). But go with what ends up making the most sense to you! If you realize a different order makes more sense in your head, I'd go with your instinct.
Robodrone
4/1/21, 7:45 PM
As a rubber and leather ponyboy myself, my transformation is somewhat more mundane, but I would trade in a heartbeat for Ethans spot in the stable! So glad I finally found this piece!
4/1/21, 7:42 PM
As always hot as hell... Hope Vince turns Eli into a toilet slave as part of his humiliation
kuro
4/1/21, 5:56 PM
Hah, loved the imagery of Charley being disappointed at his imaginary self squandering an opportunity - and thereby altering his own mental state, tumbling further down the rabbit hole! Small changes: extraneous space in *" really into the blowjob ."*
kuro
4/1/21, 5:46 PM
Another great chapter! Charley coming to accept that he's maybe more than a little interested in what Tyzon has to offer - what's not to like? Particularly the ambiguity of how deliberate the alien folks are in regards to the sticky situation they're getting Charley into... Small notes: *"sensory nodes ."* has an extraneous space.
kuro
4/1/21, 5:16 PM
I had this story recommended to me by a friend, and I'm definitely enjoying it - from the scholarship to the amiable interaction (to the jock getting altered into something he wouldn't recognise), this is a great beginning! Couple of suggestions: maybe italicise the author note (and initial text message), so that they're more clearly separated out from the rest of the text (and normal speech)? Also, you're missing a space here: *"gestalt integration,"he said"*. Otherwise, really good job!
Nutiper
4/1/21, 5:00 PM
The way he gets *literally* mindfucked from the sight of Tyzon's big dick is so hot, and so *fun*... Charley being all "haha I'm totally straight—woooah, that is a big dick, my brain feels funny—*oh shit I'm cumming from the sight of it alone*—" Whew!! I'm really excited for the next chapter, and to see what comes next. Every chapter has been so damn inventive and hot! I can never quite predict how it'll go, and every new twist is a turn-on, and the dynamic between Charley and Tyzon is *hot*, and I love it.
4/1/21, 3:55 PM
As per usual, really great job. You are really developing each of the characters very well and love the different perspectives in their own voices. Can't wait to read what happens to Eli
Henlo2
4/1/21, 3:52 PM
This series is unique and hot!! Keep it up!
4/1/21, 3:42 PM
would like to know more....what happens next?