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kuro
4/1/21, 5:56 PM
Hah, loved the imagery of Charley being disappointed at his imaginary self squandering an opportunity - and thereby altering his own mental state, tumbling further down the rabbit hole! Small changes: extraneous space in *" really into the blowjob ."*
kuro
4/1/21, 5:46 PM
Another great chapter! Charley coming to accept that he's maybe more than a little interested in what Tyzon has to offer - what's not to like? Particularly the ambiguity of how deliberate the alien folks are in regards to the sticky situation they're getting Charley into... Small notes: *"sensory nodes ."* has an extraneous space.
kuro
4/1/21, 5:16 PM
I had this story recommended to me by a friend, and I'm definitely enjoying it - from the scholarship to the amiable interaction (to the jock getting altered into something he wouldn't recognise), this is a great beginning! Couple of suggestions: maybe italicise the author note (and initial text message), so that they're more clearly separated out from the rest of the text (and normal speech)? Also, you're missing a space here: *"gestalt integration,"he said"*. Otherwise, really good job!
Nutiper
4/1/21, 5:00 PM
The way he gets *literally* mindfucked from the sight of Tyzon's big dick is so hot, and so *fun*... Charley being all "haha I'm totally straight—woooah, that is a big dick, my brain feels funny—*oh shit I'm cumming from the sight of it alone*—" Whew!! I'm really excited for the next chapter, and to see what comes next. Every chapter has been so damn inventive and hot! I can never quite predict how it'll go, and every new twist is a turn-on, and the dynamic between Charley and Tyzon is *hot*, and I love it.
4/1/21, 3:55 PM
As per usual, really great job. You are really developing each of the characters very well and love the different perspectives in their own voices. Can't wait to read what happens to Eli
Henlo2
4/1/21, 3:52 PM
This series is unique and hot!! Keep it up!
4/1/21, 3:42 PM
would like to know more....what happens next?
Apr 1, 2021
boi98229
4/1/21, 7:41 AM
I love this story!! -- one of the most erotic stories I've read!! i really wish i could meet both Marcus and John, or better yet Controlme and his Master, or perhaps a lot more realistically i really want to go read more of ControlMe's stories! Thanks for a great story!

4/1/21, 10:09 AM
@boi98229 Unfortunately, I don't have a 'master.' Just a persistent erotic fantasy of what it would feel like to have such a person dominating my life.
Apr 1, 2021
4/1/21, 8:01 AM
I remember AVF's original story and this is an excellent take on that idea. It was super hot while also being written in a very realistic style.

4/1/21, 10:08 AM
@Varlance Much appreciated. I know you have worked with AVF in the past. I also look forward to his take on what he has inspired.
4/1/21, 9:20 AM
I don't find this story very hot, but it is so cute, and I find it really creative. Still a fave.