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2/9/25, 1:18 PM
Super hot. Can't wait to see him get fat and dumb!
Anonymous
2/9/25, 11:06 AM
Damn man! This was amazing! Ngl, I like the idea of the tables being turned on John
2/9/25, 7:14 AM
Really great story, I love all those fantasy and changing to the men. Expceting how John will be involved since he also have the ring on himself.
essay
1/31/25, 6:10 AM
Man, where to even start with this? You've got a gift for steadily ramping up the action, while still leaving plenty of room to grow. I mean, pretty much every story should strive for that kind of progression, but not a lot actually nail it! So many of them either "blow their load" on the first conversion, or fill out their length with a plot that just kind of sits alongside the kink instead of actively contributing to it. Let's just take a look at this chapter to see what I'm talking about. Pretty much everything, from the intro with the Drone Commander, to Tyson assuming control of the drones in the van, to the players gradually succumbing to the hypnotic effects of the new equipment...it's all as deeply-infused with erotic energy as the gear is with nanodrones. By the time the rubberized players got onto the field and started syncing up like a hive-mind as they dominated the skins, I'd already gotten off. But then, you end the chapter with only Logan converted! I think that might be the first time I've ever felt blue-balled right after finishing! See what I mean? Despite being a sizable 5k words, all of it oozing with fetish fuel, this chapter feels like it's just an appetizer for what's to come! Seriously, though -- I *need* to see the rest of the team get into a big conversion orgy next chapter. And if anyone resists...well, the attendant drones are still right there, just waiting for 232 to take control of them. Mike definitely seems like he's going to need special treatment, though. I wonder what would be more appropriate: turning him into the thing he despises, or "sparing" him so that he's the only weakling left, surrounded by perfect male specimens? :smiling_imp: I'm also curious about that initial scene with the Drone Commander...was the idea that the gear is going to be mass-produced, i.e. distributed all across the country? That could be another interesting thread to pull on.

essay
1/31/25, 9:24 AM
@[essay](/user/show/10046121) So I wasn't going to add this part, but fuck it: Would you be interested in a beta reader? Don't get me wrong, the ideas and overall structure of your work are amazing, up there with the best. But I think that extra bit of polish that a second set of eyes brings to the table could elevate this story to legendary status. And I'm totally not suggesting this because I literally cannot wait for the next chapter. Nope. I'm being completely altruistic here. :wink: Jokes aside, I've been browsing the site for years, and every year I tell myself, "THIS year I'm actually going to write something." But of course there's always some excuse, like I don't think it'll be good enough, or original enough, or I don't have enough free time to really sit down and crank something out. Luckily, it turns out I don't have to write anything, because apparently there's someone out there who shares my exact taste! Seriously, I once had an idea for a story that went almost exactly like the "rubbers vs skins" scrimmage in this chapter. When I got to that part, I wondered for a minute whether I was secretly connected to a hive mind without my knowledge. Anyway, I know this is all totally crazy -- I mean, I'm not even sure if you read these comments at all, let alone whether you'd be remotely interested in my offer. But I am sure that if you do, and you are, then I'd never forgive myself if I didn't at least take a chance. Shoot me a DM on the forum if I made the right choice. Otherwise, I'll just delete this post in a couple days.

2/9/25, 5:11 AM
@[essay](/user/show/10046121) I do read all the comments! I love the fact people are enjoying my writing. I had no idea anyone would like any of it when I started, but I'm happy to see my own fantasies are shared by others. I'll message you
2/9/25, 4:23 AM
Super hot series!
2/9/25, 3:08 AM
Hot, good build up, and while the mechanics (mind and body control) aren't inherently original, their implementation makes this new and enjoyable. Cannot wait for the next entry!
2/5/25, 7:16 PM
Honestly i am not sure what i would want to happen in upcoming chapters. The household Dom is so smooth at coercing other guys to submit, obey and serve, and his approach is so hidden with his use of drugs that it certainly seems pretty non-consensual. With the first two Parker brothers their horizons were happily expanded all along the way. i am doubting from the discussion that John will thank anyone for expanding his horizons or anything else. i can only hope that if a Dom goes down that in the end he feels a strong need to manhandle and hard fuck a very submissive bottom boy, and that my character is the one he chooses to dominate and use. ;) In either case i will lament one less totally dominant man in the world (even if he is/was 100% hetero). :(

2/5/25, 7:18 PM
@[boi98229](/user/show/10027285) When you’re done with this story you should read the rise and fall of Johnny football which tells John’s story from his pov

2/9/25, 1:48 AM
@[Jack Parker](/user/show/10016753) i really loved the way you weaved the physical sex into the psychological power plays. i am not a reader who just wants to get in and get off. i enjoy the character development, relationships, plot, and other context that for me makes the sex so much hotter. i suppose for that very reason i am too much invested at this point in all these characters and where they are going from here, particularly Sammy and our unnamed seriously demoted household Alpha. (BTW i would love to have a name for him!!) So thanks for the suggestion to go back, but i can't right now. i will come back when i am right up to date with the timeline I'm currently following.
2/8/25, 11:57 PM
Buckle your seatbelt, this is gonna be quite a ride …

2/9/25, 1:39 AM
@[Beaner](/user/show/2654278) Hopefully it'll be a thrilling ride for you all!
2/8/25, 11:30 PM
Wow, I love where this one is heading. I was unsure for a bit how the story tied into the story challenge, but the ending made it clear. The suggestion made to Chris is great; that mod is like a gay man's ultimate dream. I hope things continue to heat up in future chapters.

2/9/25, 1:38 AM
@[CollegeBoys69](/user/show/10059398) Thanks for the praise! Yeah, I guess the "waking up like this" doesn't take place til chapter 2... so stay tuned!
Anonymous
2/9/25, 1:19 AM
I love all the different characters! So many sexy possibilities for how this can go. I'd love to see Anthony's nipple sensitivity more on display. I really hope this continues!