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3/23/21, 8:33 PM
Wasn't what I was expecting reading the second chapter first, but this is pretty hot and creative! Really enjoying this story!
3/23/21, 8:10 PM
Chapter 2, heh? Well this is promising and surprinsingly easy to understand without having read first part. Only one phrase implied lore. I am really interested in the story. Oh, looked what you wrote already. There is the first chapter. Going to comment on it.
3/23/21, 7:53 PM
Oh, man. This was hot. I loved that Liam wanted to "change" and that "any change" was hot. Would love to see more description of other ways he got changed as well as a continuation. Really, really loved it.
Anonymous
3/23/21, 7:43 PM
Well, as I talked with Math_Reez in a private conversation, one of the idea I had during writing WAS that Elijah had been hypnotized. I didn't go with it because I couldn't find a way for th story to solve this issues and be credible. A scene I didn't write for time constraint was that Elijah asked his parents to take off those "childish things" while he wasn't there. Elijah wouldn't have known how to explain his new world-view over phone/letters with Jacob which is why he didn't talk with his friends much. Ah, someone who got that Elijah started hypnotizing after the bar. Not everyone got it. Honestly, rather than writing a sequel chapter, I think I will write an "extended cut" which add scenes explaining what was going on. One day. Probably not soon, I want to focus on other stories I already have. But it should solve the rough problem. Yeah! Someone else who wonders about mutual hypnosis! Albeit, I precise immediately, Elijah hasn't realized he was hypnotized and fought back. He just learned hypnosis and decided to have a great master, twisting the subconscious orders he received. Your phrases is worded in a way where I wonder if you got the former impression rather than the later... A community story could be nice, if I know some want to write about it.
3/23/21, 7:41 PM
loved it!
3/23/21, 6:40 PM
I personally don't mind the final conversion method for Ben. Though I would echo a bit some of the other comments that it was a bit too easy and too quick compared to the gradual transformation of the other two. I also think that approach could open a totally separate conversion storyline based on the watersports play. But other than that, the overall story is another standard high quality product of yours once again, so thumbs up to it in general! I'll sure be looking forward to a sequel of this! With the premise of a tainted well and a planned B&B, I can see many possibilities where this could go... ;)
3/23/21, 6:12 PM
There was a mixup with formatting, this is chapter two of a story lol
Art
3/23/21, 6:09 PM
This begs for a continuation. Would be extremely hot having the rugby team controlled by the swim team. the part about "Kent mid fucked me and I mind fucked him" was confusing. Perhaps a little back story would be in order before continuing.
Oct 16, 2006
3/23/21, 5:42 PM
I hadn't really thought about it. What would you want to see happen to poor TB?
3/23/21, 5:10 PM
Great story - I would love to be taken unawares like that...