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3/23/21, 12:49 AM
I like this. There's like three different stories in here, all of which have potential. During the first part i thought Elijah had been brainwashed into being a soldier because his personality had changed so much from what Jacob remembered. This was reinforced by his parents attitude of wanting him to be different, his room being changed while he was gone, and his "no homo" machismo attitude. So i thought it would be about Jacob undoing that and saving his friend. For the second part i assumed it was going to be your classic "my childhood friend changed/ grew up/ grew apart and I'm going to use hypnosis to make him my friend again." The last part was Elijah hypnotizing Jacob back, which is an idea i've always been interested in writing and would love to see you expand on it. There's a lot of potential here and I'd love to see you polish it more. The writing is rough, but there's only a few points where it gets in the way of comprehension (the last section being notable), and as long as people understand what you're trying to say, that's more important than perfect grammar. So keep up the good work (when you have time) and i look forward to see what you write. Maybe take a stab at it myself 😉
3/23/21, 12:37 AM
How did Grant shoot his load into Sam when you wrote a whole passage about putting a condom on Grant's dick? If he was stealthing, you gotta tell the reader that. I didn't enjoy ending the story with that giant HOW? running in my head.
3/23/21, 12:26 AM
Now that all the pieces are in the chessboard, things will be moving pretty fast.
Evan
3/22/21, 11:41 PM
Damn, this was great. I really want to hear what his step brother did to start all this. But as much as he tried to resist, I'm glad Grant could help him feel what he needs.
Mar 21, 2021
3/22/21, 10:52 PM
Great story. I hadn't visited your Tumblr in a while, and it was a lot of fun to catch up. Hope there are more on the way!
Conversion Enthusiast
3/22/21, 10:08 PM
Hot! I think I'd have preferred a bit of a slower pacing but I don't want to interrupt your writing style either! Dang I missed this haha. Glad to read as always
3/22/21, 9:08 PM
Space and aliens. Two of my favorites. Nice story. I look forward to seeing what goes on in the human fan club.
3/22/21, 7:38 PM
Fantastic world building almost forgot what website i was reading on for a moment. Thank you for sharing this story!
Mar 21, 2021
EJG
3/22/21, 4:22 PM
Mmm, Love it. Now ya just need an office FULL of MUSCLETITTED Hunks
3/22/21, 3:59 PM
amazing! great hot stuff here please continue!