Recent Comments

3/21/21, 9:11 PM
Yes yes yes! All that sexy facial hair! There are some times you refer to "you" instead of to Cameron. Other than that: keep it up, please!
Mar 21, 2021
Anonymous
3/21/21, 9:06 PM
Excellent
Anonymous
3/21/21, 9:01 PM
Well, first the site told me some lines weren't filled despite me having written the resume and other things, so I filled everything and then it accepted to save the story. Not sure what happened. Wasn't even classified as a contender, okay. I don't plan on writing anything this month, so even WHEN/if it became a series, it won't be now. Might as well put it in the context it was supposed to be in, even if who wrote it isn't well secret.
3/21/21, 9:00 PM
I wholeheartedly agree with Wrestlr. A wonderfully written sci fi story. I'd love to read more.
Anonymous
3/21/21, 8:55 PM
I'm looking forward to the dad helping him out
Martin
3/21/21, 8:54 PM
I didn't remove it from the challenge myself. You must have made an error when submitting or editing it, so it wasn't in the challenge. I've added it now to the challenge. Or, if you really want to make a series out of it, I'll remove it again. Your choice.
boi98229
3/21/21, 7:47 PM
Not very original plot, but very well set up and well written. It was still really arousing. I am looking forward to more to see where you take the story now.
Anonymous
3/21/21, 7:37 PM
Oh that makes sense! I myself was actually wondering if Tom would eventually get Ben by dosing the shower water but apparently not 😅
3/21/21, 7:36 PM
I'm loving the story. I can't wait to see where it goes next. I have just an advice for you: proofread the story for mistakes and such. Keep on going man!❤
3/21/21, 6:33 PM
BPtime, I had that thought too after I finished writing the story. My handwavey answer is that, no, the guy who fixed the pump didn't actually try any of the water (or if he did, it was just a sip, not enough to affect him). This is also my answer to the question of why Ben isn't affected by showering or brushing his teeth.