Recent Comments

3/21/21, 8:15 AM
Thanks for the new chapter! As always very good written. I would love to have read more about the varieties of visual and non-visual modifications. And I'm looking forward to see how Noel's and 107's life will be in the system .
3/21/21, 8:02 AM
another great chapter, even though id like to see more, understand that you need break from this. What i liked was that Vince has given his big brother a liking for leather, be good to see his cop uniform being turned into a leather cop uniform
3/21/21, 6:51 AM
looking forward to see where it goes!!
3/21/21, 6:24 AM
I love the premise here, but I get the feeling this story was written in a hurry. I noticed a lot of formatting errors and typos that made it hard to read. I also had a hard time getting invested in the characters (or even telling them apart), so their transformation into demons didn't mean very much to me. My advice would be to keep writing and look at the work of authors like Tom Gungy, who's really a master of this type of story; he knows how to build suspense, so that the corruption (when it inevitably comes) is exciting for the reader.
3/21/21, 6:10 AM
can't wait for the next one
3/21/21, 5:14 AM
He's already so close, it's hot to anticipate what he's got coming, can't wait for him to give in.
3/21/21, 4:25 AM
like it especaly the feet and sock park would love have skin feet sock and boot heavy second part. best some banker or snooty collage kid getting into tough and musky roughneck skin
3/21/21, 4:23 AM
I feel like this one leaves me wanting more- what is the real truth of Spike, who is this man? Definitely a hot interaction and story though. The resistance and slow stripping away of that under the assumed hypnosis is pretty exciting actually.
3/21/21, 4:22 AM
Definitely feels like a good start to a story verse. Ethan and James seem like great characters and the writing was good- hot, paced well, and did a great job of making the obliviousness part of the draw.
3/21/21, 4:21 AM
Great story and loved the immersive element of the video file. Really hot and enjoyable, loving your stories so far!