Recent Comments

3/21/21, 1:15 AM
Really hot. I'm liking the way its going so far as it seems realistic for the motivations. Only thing I would really like was of it expands outside if the family to include more cops. Would be great if Erik offered up his partner to take his place. Seems like the kinda scumbag move he would make or it could be part of breaking him down since his thing is the uniform. Cant imagine his partner would be a great guy if he sticks with Erik.
3/20/21, 10:58 PM
i just wish it was longer and more developed before others add their voice to your superior narrative.
3/20/21, 10:37 PM
I'm really digging this. I love gradual changes like this, and the more emphasis on man musk the better.
Anonymous
3/20/21, 10:08 PM
I loved this. Please keep going! I'm exited for the next one.
EJG
3/20/21, 9:35 PM
This is not fair,leaving us to our imaginations
EJG
3/20/21, 9:32 PM
Oh well. I can only dwell the future in my fantasies
3/20/21, 9:29 PM
I'm excited for this -- bring it on! Mmmm... blue balls.
3/20/21, 9:22 PM
Great ideas in this beginning chapter! I look forward to where you take this story.
Jack
3/20/21, 7:19 PM
Fuck, this was hot. I'm so not into foot stuff, but I genuinely came while I was reading the interaction between Vincent and Erik. You're so good that you're making me like stuff I don't like! And the moment where Erik admitted that he regretted nothing, and so neither would Vincent? God, it was amazing. Quality writing once again. I mentioned this before, but it's so cathartic to read as these bastards get what's coming to them. There's so much more that can happen, and I'm genuinely excited to see where it goes. I'm sorry about life being shitty. It happens, but it's never fun. There isn't much I can do, other than compliment you and say that your writing ability continues to improve with every chapter. I'm happy to help you proofread the stories, if you would like. Let me know.
3/20/21, 7:17 PM
Well, the incest element isn't for me--never has been, never will be--but the slow mental change is, as ever, fantastic! And I love the humorous section of Ben trying to pretend to be stupefied as well (his saying "...uh...Daddy" reminds me of my own attempts at sexy talk). :p And hooray, the well is destroyed! Now everything will be perfectly fine and Ben definitely WON'T be reduced to a mindless musclehead. Yes, that is sarcasm. :p Great story, Hypnothrill! :D