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3/20/21, 5:19 AM
Great stuff! The second half of the chapter was worth the wait!
3/20/21, 5:12 AM
You already pinpointed the main problems with this story: it's got a solid premise, but it's too rushed, especially towards the end. The last section introduces a lot of twists, but I had a lot of trouble following exactly what was happening or why it was happening. This is exactly the kind of story that would work better released in smaller installments, which would give you more time to work on each one (and a chance to get more feedback on how your readers are responding to the story).
Evan
3/20/21, 5:07 AM
I really enjoyed that some guys succumbed immediately and some tried to resist. But in the end, it turned out everyone felt natural about guys who are horny should feel no inhibitions about making themselves and others feel good. n't wait for the next take and give.
3/20/21, 4:33 AM
Part 2. Part 3 will be a bit more explicit with the sex. This one is more eroticism, foreplay, and a bit of love <3
3/20/21, 4:29 AM
Hope this continues, I want more
boi98229
3/20/21, 4:29 AM
I loved the story, but the story was too short. i thought you missed an opportunity to clarify the mind training done on Matt and Lindsay's exercise audio track. That aspect of the story was barely implied and very easy to miss. In fact i am still not entirely sure that you meant it that way. i really enjoy hypnosis so including the mind training aspect more explicitly and in more detail would have been hotter. The welcome Lindsay received on arrival, and his time spent on the sofa with the other guys was pretty hot, but also (to my own preference) could have included more detail. For example, did Neil doctor Lindsay's beer? With what, and what effect in addition to the expected effect of the alcohol in the beer. Spraying Lindsay with cum so they could strip him to wash his clothes was a nice touch. I thought that whole scene could have been expanded. Why didn't they suggest a circle jerk? That would have been one technique to arrange their starting to touch Lindsay in erotic ways. I am just throwing out ideas for ways in which this chapter could have been longer. When i read a good story, i just naturally never want it to end, so longer is better! Nevertheless shorter was really hot too! Thanks so much! P.S. It could also be made longer with lots more chapters! i would totally be into that.
3/20/21, 3:56 AM
oh my god i love this!!! hit all the right buttons
Elm
3/20/21, 3:19 AM
Its a good start! a little rough around the edges, but very solid first try :) I wanna see where you are going with this!
3/20/21, 3:18 AM
Loved every bit of this. Pressed every button. Everywhere. Thanks once again Derek. I really have to get my shit together and get back in the game too. Real world book research and writing is taking a lot of brain space. Maybe I should just write more porn.
3/20/21, 3:06 AM
I love a good demon story with a straight guy changed, it's so hot. You did a great job here and I am glad this story peeked my insterest enough to read.