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Ben
3/20/21, 9:46 AM
I liked it! You could maybe spend a bit more time on the transformation (part of the challenge of these stories is coming up with new ways to describe being pollinated, the pleasure and intoxication, and so forth), but I'm really looking forward to Part 3 - keep it up! :)
3/20/21, 9:09 AM
the wait is definitely worth it! you are killing it right now,this is one of my favorite series on this site these days. shame that I need to wait for the next chapter now xD I would read that whole thing in one sitting in a heartbeat. I probably will once it's completed keep up the good work,we appreciate it
3/20/21, 8:27 AM
I'm intrigued on how things will develop with Eli, I enjoy when smart characters are the enthralled ones and are not dumbed Down, there is a lot of ways to play with someone who is smart having so many confusing feelings, and It's very intriguing. I also gotta say that I really enjoyed how you described his utter confusion and Jealousy, I think his envy is a very strong defining character trait to explore and what I enjoyed the most is that so far aside from obviously Vincent, Eli is the most fully realized character to me, down to his feelings rather than fully changing just kinda switching his hatred and anger for Vincent into his father and also discovering how much he hates Erik makes me wonder if Vincent might use Eli to torture Erik if he ever were to "reward" Eli for anything, he'd be spiteful enough to get his kicks not only at obeying his baby brother, but also making his older brother suffer as well, middle child syndrome taken to extremes.
Anonymous
3/20/21, 8:20 AM
i was a bit confused by the start... i didn't realise it was a "before"... but after the "present" was hot... the mixture of the "traditional" pollination story and the care and love John shows Chase... plus very hot description of John's physical features and smell... thanks for sharing... and can't wait for the next part... i wanna join the motorcycle gang too!!!
Martin
3/20/21, 8:05 AM
I just started to read this story and before I get down into its core and probably forget myself in a sexual haze, I wanted to mention that I had to reread the beginning twice to make sure to get who the "brunette" and the "blond" one is referring to. Using descriptive terms is fine, but if it's a way to identify people as well, you have to remember two separate things (the name as well as the descriptive term) and also connect them correctly. It's a minor thing, but it was such a glaring issue right at the beginning, I wanted to get it of my chest right away :)
3/20/21, 6:59 AM
Good job with all of the character development! I'll admit I like the "Pollination" series best when it's essentially a horror story, so I was disappointed that we didn't get more resistance from Chase. To me, it just loses something when the plant is essentially functioning like any old magic muscle growth MacGuffin (e.g. John could have brought Chase a magic muscle growth potion, and you'd have basically the same story).
3/20/21, 6:39 AM
I felt like I was sucking on one of those candies, I was getting harder as I progressed through the story. It would have been good enough if you just made them sluts, but the added exclamations about redirecting his money and time reserved for others on clothes for himself and his pleasure was so erotic.
3/20/21, 6:37 AM
love love love. hoping this turns into a long series
3/20/21, 5:19 AM
Great stuff! The second half of the chapter was worth the wait!
3/20/21, 5:12 AM
You already pinpointed the main problems with this story: it's got a solid premise, but it's too rushed, especially towards the end. The last section introduces a lot of twists, but I had a lot of trouble following exactly what was happening or why it was happening. This is exactly the kind of story that would work better released in smaller installments, which would give you more time to work on each one (and a chance to get more feedback on how your readers are responding to the story).