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3/12/21, 12:20 AM
Two words : Fucking Amazing. Thanks! And, I am only half through.
3/11/21, 11:47 PM
I was about to marry a girl but then My husband to. be. came into my life.I :gave him her diamond. and we got matching weddingbands on our midde fingers.
3/11/21, 11:38 PM
cool, will the Memoriser be involved or will be an expy of him?
3/11/21, 11:35 PM
Yup, that'll do it for me. Classic in the making Derek. Love it
3/11/21, 11:33 PM
Love this the way you described the superheros reshaping of his memories was really hot to read.
3/11/21, 11:27 PM
the ending was the hottest part! man im excited for the next chapter!
The Author, but anonymous
3/11/21, 11:26 PM
So, dropping a comment anonymously to not spoil the suspense, which hopefully is allowed. Thank you for commenting, seeing what people think really is the best part of writing here. @Bill, thank you, and I'm glad you liked the concept. With not describing Darryn, it was a conscious choice, though I get that maybe for a 3rd person narrative knowing more about the viewpoint character helps. In this case, it was more to let the reader sub in their favourite celebrity/crush/themselves as they prefer. @darkblade2814 it's interesting you say that, as this wasn't the original story I was planning to submit to this competition. The initial one I was working on I kept expanding the concept of, and the number of heroes involved, and I realised there's no good way to put it into a single chapter. So this one is a one and done, but there's another team of soon-to-be super-sluts on the horizon.
Anonymous
3/11/21, 9:31 PM
wow. wish I could this attention when I went shopping......
Anonymous
3/11/21, 9:22 PM
super story snd so different from the norm.....
Alex
3/11/21, 8:27 PM
I really like reading this again. I wanna be in a focus group like that.