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3/8/21, 3:04 PM
Love the transition into a pup slave. I am really into this series! Hard as a rock hehehe 🙊
3/8/21, 2:57 PM
Fan-FREAKING-tastic! loved this!!!
3/8/21, 1:51 PM
Thanks a lot! It means a lot to me that people take pleasure in what we've written, and I really value feedback! I think throughout the writing process, we jointly and individually concluded that if a Demon were to actually come to Earth - you're going to see some pretty dark shit as a result. Whilst writing this, we've actively tried to avoid a lot of the common things we've read in other stories of demonic beings; not because they're in any way bad, but because we've already read them and we don't want to create something that's an emulation of some of the awesome writing that's already been published on the site. This chapter certainly is one of the darker ones throughout the series; simply because of the brutality that's been unlocked within Dom and it following Jason's degradation; I don't want to speak on MisterXIX's behalf, but I'm kind of unapologetic about that - *corrupting* a character means they get *corrupted* and this is a story about the aspirations and motivations of a Demon who has world domination in his sights... there are no saints here! I like to think that there's going to be something for everyone in the completed story - whilst there certainly will be more corruption, we're trying to be inventive about how we get there - it won't be cookie-cutter, semi-identical transformations every chapter. We have a number of plot points we're excited to write and we think we have a solid story to tell. Ultimately, we're both enjoying the creative process and we're going to publish the chapters in the hopes that some people enjoy it too; but graciously accepting that it won't be everybody's cup of chai!
3/8/21, 1:45 PM
Yup, agree with everything Derek Williams said.
3/8/21, 1:43 PM
This is good stuff! I take it the main inspiration is "The Age of Steel?" When all of London wears earbuds like this? That's part of the reason I'm opposed to smart earphones, if I'm honest. :p As Conversion Enthusiast said, the main notes I have are to check spelling ("soul intelligent" should be "sole intelligent", for example) and grammar (there's one case when you switch from past to present tense, for instance). But other than that, it's excellent!
Island Jock
3/8/21, 1:11 PM
Great story, you're a good writer. Might be darker than some people like, but if thats what you like, you do you. I love that this is different than most stories. Keep up the hot work.
Ravenclaw
3/8/21, 12:49 PM
is good. hope there is more
Bostonlthrboy
3/8/21, 12:08 PM
so fucking hot!! i wish i met hypnodad
3/8/21, 11:52 AM
another vote for more massage
Scott
3/8/21, 11:47 AM
i hope the 2nd part does come very soon!