Recent Comments

3/8/21, 1:43 PM
This is good stuff! I take it the main inspiration is "The Age of Steel?" When all of London wears earbuds like this? That's part of the reason I'm opposed to smart earphones, if I'm honest. :p As Conversion Enthusiast said, the main notes I have are to check spelling ("soul intelligent" should be "sole intelligent", for example) and grammar (there's one case when you switch from past to present tense, for instance). But other than that, it's excellent!
Island Jock
3/8/21, 1:11 PM
Great story, you're a good writer. Might be darker than some people like, but if thats what you like, you do you. I love that this is different than most stories. Keep up the hot work.
Ravenclaw
3/8/21, 12:49 PM
is good. hope there is more
Bostonlthrboy
3/8/21, 12:08 PM
so fucking hot!! i wish i met hypnodad
3/8/21, 11:52 AM
another vote for more massage
Scott
3/8/21, 11:47 AM
i hope the 2nd part does come very soon!
3/8/21, 10:31 AM
It's not finished. Additional chapters will detail how Matt, Carl, and Justin all fell into Aiden's control. In fact, I started writing the story with the next chapter about Matt's enslavement. It was only after I was mostly done with that chapter that I realized I had to tell Eric's story first, and then went back and re-wrote the story with Eric as the first victim we see fall.
Anonymous
3/8/21, 10:26 AM
Sexy stuff! Wouldn't mind having this happen to me
3/8/21, 10:00 AM
I like all the stuff with Matt and Justin reinforcing the programming and telling Eric how good it is to be a slave. To me, it would have worked a little bit better if their dialogue had a clear tone: either ecstatically happy (cult-like) or flatly unemotional (drone-like). Also, I would have loved to have gotten a sense of who Matt and Justin were before their conversions. Still, a well-done story, and I look forward to reading your future work!
Anonymous
3/8/21, 9:26 AM
i think the word you want is "naive" instead of "nieve"